Hello, Obsidian giving you a review! And, if you don't like some of the things I say, just ignore it!
First, I have to say well done. I really took a minute to stare at my own hands, questioning my own being and existence. The repeating of 'What's inside? What's inside?', I'm not sure what you were going for, but I felt that the person in the poem never stopped questioning.
"The life of me could be so small.
And by small, I mean nothing at all.
By nothing at all, I mean so very small."
In this part, you rhymed 'small' with 'small'. I realize this was probably on purpose, but I'm just one of those people that rhyming a word with the same word bothers me.
Other than that, I really liked the poem. It left me thinking and that's amazing!
Points: 6
Reviews: 6
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