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by Thediffident

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Fri Feb 03, 2023 7:47 pm
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Ignorance wrote a review...

Wow, this is beautifully written. The attention the detail is INCREDIBLE. And the ending had me in tears. The way you blended the words was genius on your part. You built up all that emotion throughout the poem, and then the drop at the end? The shock value was absolutely perfect. In fact, I only have one, little critique: it feels blank. At many points throughout the poem, it feels as if nothing is there. Other than that, I love it! Keep it up!

Love is friendship that has caught fire. It is quiet understanding, mutual confidence, sharing and forgiving. It is loyalty through good and bad times. It settles for less than perfection and makes allowances for human weaknesses.
— Ann Landers