Published January 22, 2023
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Wow, this is beautifully written. The attention the detail is INCREDIBLE. And the ending had me in tears. The way you blended the words was genius on your part. You built up all that emotion throughout the poem, and then the drop at the end? The shock value was absolutely perfect. In fact, I only have one, little critique: it feels blank. At many points throughout the poem, it feels as if nothing is there. Other than that, I love it! Keep it up!