Stand by me
when I am at my weakest,
when I'm okay on my own.
That's how I know
I can trust you.
How's it going? Again, another short poem but it still serves a substantial purpose. It can give the reader an idea of what two people need in a relationship, loyalty and trust. I took a while to think after I read this. I thought about dependability in relationship and how vital it is. I don't know what it about your poems, they make me stop and actually make me think about life. I tend to be a deep thinker as you tell. Anyways there is only one small little change that I would like to make in this poem. Stand by mewhen I am at my weakest,But don't go ( I would take "but" out of here, to me it doesn't really effect the poem very well)when I'm okay on my own.That's how I knowI can trust you. Still this is pretty good and I will continue to keep reading your work. Stay strong,-BornToBeGreat
Good morning/afternoon/evening/ night! I'm here for a little review!I really like this poem! The last line kind of hits you when you read it, like an unexpected twist almost. It's a little bit of a reverse than what people are normally talking about, which was a nice change of pace!Overall a great poem, keep it up! Thank you!
Much shorter than I expected, but it's not really a bad thing. Of course, if you made it a bit longer and let us expierience more of your feelings it would be great, but even without that you gave us a look at the raw desires of the protagonist's needs. I feel like this is something that comes from the very bottom of one's heart, the very thing they need in a relationship, and in that this poem is very powerful, despite its short length. You have shown us a very intimate and vulnerable cofession, great poem. Keep writing Wolf!
Hey! Forever here for a very short review!Here we have an awesome poem. It's short, simple but wonderful in its own terms. I loved it. It tells us a truth to which people pay no heed. I have never thought in this way but the poem made me think about it. How we think ppl don't need us when theyvare okay but it's actually not the right thought. The only critique I have is in the second and the third line. You have capitalized after putting a comma. Maybe replace that comma with a full stop or maybe write but in lower case. Choose the one which seems better in your eyes. Again, it was a great poem.Keep writing!~Forever
I wish it wasn't rude to comment poetry of my own. I have words for you, friend. Few, but enough.To review:Remove but, it lowers impact.This is a nice two sentences. It works well, but I have to be in the mood to hear your words properly. If you want to change that, try something adding simile or metaphor. Build a poem-scene. If not, just a story then, of what happened or what will be, you know.
Good morning, afternoon, night, or aftermorrow!This is an awesome poem! It's short, but powerful. I really enjoyed the rhythm! I am extremely excited to read more!!Thank you and until next time!
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