Published October 19, 2011
Warning! This is rather loud and incontinent in context. This has some harsh language in it. Don't want anyone getting mad at me for no good reason. Now, thank you for reading.
-And the World Screams Why?-
Walk the endless line to death,
singin' and writin' 'till my last breath.
'Cause I'm heartless (heartless)
headless at best,
to my chest, I caress
the dreams of honor I invest
and enter cardiac arrest
with the blessed
besieged by a horror
of mirrors and descievers,
lairs and deniers
of a power higher than the rest,
but not God (not God)
for he doesn't decide what I do.
If I do it,
I do it all out,
whip it out,
break it down,
lay it out,
pat it down,
pop it out,
Rile it around until
we all freak out.
But I don't wanna stand-up
at this comedy club
of comedy thugs,
thinkin' I'm on another drug,
when I'm not,
just bugged that your mind's
are on other crimes
and I'm up here, dancin' for dimes
and dollars
just to make you holler
like a slut, a whore,
a walker of smut.
But I'm gonna reap my sow
and you're gonna eat your words.
How do they taste?
Like shit, I concur.
Now, fuck off, you stupid eye sore!
'Cause if you fuck with me,
I'll make your fuckin' head whir.
And the world screams "Why?!"
--Z.H., Founder LandShark Productions
Thanks for reading, commenting, reviewing, whatever ya do. Just don't be a hater, please: if you don't like it, then forget about it. Don't like it as in you think it's trash. You know what I mean.
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A true pleasure to read! This was a very mature piece of literature, the kind of stuff I like to read. The kind of stuff that "scoffs at the world", if you know what I mean. I also found myself feeling very cool after reading this piece of literature, like I was a bad ass! It's definitely a very cool piece of literature, I'd like to thank you for sharing it. ;D
Okay, so I really love this! It's VERY powerful, you really have a way with words!
) Keep it up! I want to read more of your work 
I know it's very hard to write a good poem that rhymes. Pretty much impossible (at least for me...). So I think you did really well on this point!
I like the part in the first stanza, where you left off the g's in singing and writing. It made it flow a lot better! The little repetitions you did throughout the poem let us see which parts were meant to be the most powerful. The part where it said "and enter cardiac arrest" was awesome xD I was a little confused by this: "lairs and deniers." Was it supposed to say liars?
"but not God (not God)
for doesn't decide what I do." <-- I didn't get this part either...
I liked the use of the word "rile" at the end of the stanza.
"just bugged that your mind's
are on other crimes" <-- This part was also confusing. Did you mean minds?
"and I'm up here, dancin' for dimes
and dollars
just to make you holler
like a slut, a whore,
a walker of smut." <-- This part was soo powerful. Yes, a little inappropriate (eheheh...), but fantastic. I really get what you're saying here
"But I'm gonna reap my sow" <-- I didn't really understand this part. (maybe I just don't know the word sow well enough...?)
"and the world screams "Why?"" <-- Soo wonderful. Really powerful as well. Although, since the world is "screaming," I would put an exclamation point on it like this: ?! or !?
Overall, I found this to be a wonderful piece that spoke powerfully to me (have I used the word powerfully enough yet?
Stay awesome,
Socks
Woah. Seriously. This is amazing. !!!
This is so powerful, I totally get what you're saying!!!!!!
I'll try writing a better review later... but just so you know I really love this!!