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This Feeling?

I hate feeling,

This soulful rape, 

Without healing,

No escape. 

It was there, 

In darkness, 

It is everywhere, 

This is the mess. 

Take me that way, 

What is this feeling?

What do you say?

What is its meaning?

Who ever can guess what this poem is talking about, and give reason from the text that makes you believe that you are correct, wins a secret prize!

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godlypopo
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Hello, truth, happy review day!

(Nooooo I shouldn't have read the previous comment!)

This is a very impactful poem for the reader. You use dramatic imagery which drags them down in a sorrowful atmosphere that is created. The speaker is expressed as trapped in this poem; caught in a cage of grief. You create this imagery by using phrases like no escape and in darkness. You can clearly picture the sadness intertwining through the speakers feelings which causes the reader to think about what may have caused this poem. You spark up questions and drag the reader into a consulting mood as different theory's dance in their mind.
I have a few suggestions for you:
1. I believe this is a poem and not a script? So the reviewers know what you have written, I suggest going onto publishing centre and editing it so it is set as a poem.
2. I say this to a lot of people, you don't need to capitalise every line as they are not all new sentences.
3. What is this is feeling and what do you say should have question marks.

This was a lovely yet impactful work. Congrats! I would love to see more from you :D

That's all from me,
Godly :D

I have enjoyed reading your feedback on this poem.

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Dracula
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Dracula wrote a review · Sun Jan 25, 2015 4:47 am

Ummmmm. That was a big umm. :D Probably because I have no good ideas. I do have ideas, but I've got a feeling that the answer is cryptic. I thought of depression at first, because of the first four lines. There's no escape, in most cases it is very hard to heal, soulful rape is a good way to describe, and everyone hates it. But the following lines make me think that it's not talking about depression. It is everywhere? It's a mess that pulls you this way and that? Maybe longing for something so hard that you become desperate, that it's all you can think about? I'll let you tell me if I'm right or wrong. But it was a good poem/riddle, so nice job.

You are close, the answer is Grief



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