Tezzy! I wanted to review this before, but forgot! Oops!
All of the assonance here is a lot to actually read through, but I think it works for the whole vibe I got from this. It kind of twists the way everything sounds together in a way that suits the theme of Alaska being a wannabe, or a place where there's a lot of questionable things happening and everyone ignores it for unknown reasons. The way it's slurred at points also works for the way it's presented in a long spiral of thought.
The lack of actual punctuation with a period is something I'd usually not be a fan of, but like I said above, it works for the poem. It's not hard to read anywhere, so I'd say keep it because it's really fun. The feeling I get from this is like a drunken person at a bar telling a story or giving a controversial opinion of Alaska and having everyone not understand half of the words said, maybe a Canadian because of the title haha.
I also like how a lot of the lines begin with a specific living thing; a man, a woman, a fish. It really shows how everything happening is harming the environment farther than just the nature and local animals. Humans are one of the only living things that can change this behavior too, but most of the don't do anything helpful. The fact they are the first ones mentioned is another interesting thing to think about too.
I do have one thing to say though~
the natural habitat prays to nature deities as if that would cure the litter
and many crab corpses lining the pure sand barrier beaches;
The way it changes from beginning with a specific living thing to a general phrase of things together doesn't really sit with me? I think if the way the natural habitat was approached in this could've been cleaned up better than that, maybe with that it could help it be in more harmony with the rest of the ideas floating around here.
Ahh you should write more poetry like this, and tag me if you do <3
Points: 85
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