I absolutely loved this, I found myself wondering the entire time what happened. What happened to make you, or whoever this is about, not wear that bracelet anymore? Who gave it to you? Ahhh I just want to know what happened!
The line
Could probably be shorter. It's so much longer than all the other lines it just doesn't seem to fit quite the way it possibly should.inside a white coin purse, with red elephants and a gold boarder, that my mother got from Thailand
Also,
really gives the illusion that this bracelet is somehow alive and doesn't know what it did wrong, why it's just sitting in that drawer.It sits, it sits, it waits
I think you have a lot of talent in portraying emotion and I can't wait to read more of your work. (by the way this is my first review so if the quotes don't format right I'm really sorry)
Points: 372
Reviews: 14
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