Why would I ever consider how you feel?
Hello, Technolicious (what a name)! Strange here and I have a review for you!
This was a surprisingly short poem that relied on being super effective. Sadly, it wasn't strong. Well, it was strong, but not strong enough. Short poems are a hard thing to pull off, because you have to make sure it packs a punch. This, though it has a great message that attempts to drive its fists down the sands of heartbreak, fell just short.
First of all, it floats around the recurring theme about romance and heartbreak. Thing is, this is a very overused category/genre. It's all about "LISTEN TO HOW I FEEL, DARN IT!", commonly retreaded. This does it. It does it with different words, though. You add a subtle twist to this whole genre. It feels a lot more intimate. Intimacy is key when it comes to romance poems.
If it was slightly bigger, just by five words, for whatever reason, it would have been way better. Seven words isn't enough in a society where we crave more material. Good job, doing what others surprisingly don't often do.
Stay groovy, amigo
Points: 500
Reviews: 417
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