Love

Hi there Tamilwriter, and welcome to YWS, by the way! I'm Saru here for a hopefully helpful review!
First off, your title, 'Love', seems a little clichéd. Maybe change it to something more obscure?
Second, one of the first things I noticed was the excessive use of ellipses. Maybe end with simply three periods (...) or maybe something like ~ to end the poem to make it seem as if it's done, but there's still more...
I was wondering about the double use of 'but'? It kind of stops the reader in their tracks and makes them do a double take. It halts the flow a little.
The word, 'trouble' I think, might be better off changed to something like 'peril'. It might be beneficial to extend the first line a little so it sounds more rhythmic, like,

Although in times of peril, my vision's never blurred

but as I sit and wait for you, I drown in desperation

Hey there Tamilwriter! BubblegumGoddess here for a review!
Something that I would like to bring up first off is my confusion. To me this piece did not make sense with what was there. "Even in trouble my eyes never see tears." This line is a great opener, it had me intrigued and seeking more to what you had to say, the only thing here that I would change is adding a comma after trouble. "but but i am waiting for you with tears," here I couldn't understand the message you were trying to convey. I came away from this confused. Is there supposed to be two 'buts'? Also, I wish that this piece was a little bit longer.

Im sorry for such a negative review! I found this piece interesting and I just want to help out a fellow writer! Feel free to contact me and, I hope that I was able to help and better you as a writer. Keep writing!
-BubblegumGoddess

Hi there, Tamilwriter, and welcome to the site! This is Nikayla dropping in for a quick review.

I noticed that you labelled this under 'poetry' which makes sense to me, but then 'film'? I'm a little bit confused as to what you mean by that. I'm thinking that you might use this in a screenplay or script that you're writing, but I'm not quite sure and would like clarification on that. As for the piece, and delving into the couplet, I didn't find there to be a lot of substance. It doesn't make sense, though it looks as if you're starting off a Ghazal and just end it at the first couplet. The best way I can describe this poem, is, to put it frankly with you, generic.

The piece doesn't add anything new to the romance genre as it's supposedly based in, more so than film, in my opinion. The poem doesn't do anything new, and because it's so short, you kind of need that to succeed unless you execute the topic you want to poet on well. Instead of using 'love', why not use a synonym for it that's more specific? What about limerence or endearment or yearning? The amount of ellipses in the second line at the end aren't needed, so I suggest you cut them out for stronger effect and perhaps use a period there instead.

I also suggest putting a comma after 'trouble' in the first line for better flow, but it's your choice. The piece doesn't leave much of an impact, though I do find it interesting, the brevity you're trying to incorporate into the piece by having it so short. If you have any questions, feel free to ask! I hope I helped, and have a great day.