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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression: This was a wonderful little start here, looks like you've done a lot of worldbuilding here and you certainly have the start of something quite intriguing here with this character.

Anyway let's get right to it,

There are many different stories, myths, and legends on these types of things. People believe different things when it comes to these stories on vampires and werewolves. I will say my disclaimer know. It doesn't matter to me which stories and things you believe. I won't tell you what ones are true since I'm still new to this myself. I don't know what's all true. That's not what this is all about. All I really want to say is what happened to me. This is my story, all I want you to do is to listen or atleast understand what I'm talking about. You don't have understand, agree , or believe me. For that is to much to ask.

I was turned, as they would call me into a half breed werewolf. They call those turned by a werewolf halves since were not full blooded. For its in their blood carried on for generations. I was saved in my case by a full blooded werewolf. They are very much like wolf packs but the more I understand about werewolves, and wolf the more I see the similarities to humans in general. Humans are animals and mammals too. We have a lot are could learn from each other. That's how some believe the first were created through the study and sciencetists experiments or revolutionary work. Basically any non inhuman name for it. They do studies on many different animals, wolves are no exception. This is probably were these ideas came from besides that many different labes were shut down to satifie the implants of inhuman activities towards the animals. Complaints of coworkers, animal trainers, and visitors to the different facilities.

The night I almost died was a crazy, hecktack night for all those involved. That night I mad several stupid mistakes that coat me dearly. Normal people will come home with a baby or something like that's that is close to this dramatic.

It was a normal evening, I rode my bike in the middle of the night. I went to the gas station near my home. I was picking up some last minute groceries. It was un eventful at first and then when I was in the parking lost ready to go home. There was a patch of woods next to the parking lot. The woods were full of werewolves and I was attacked. I became one of them and everything was destroyed in that moment. I had to learn a new way to live because there was nothing we could do.

Hi! I'll be reviewing your work today!

First off, I like this world you're building of half-breeds and full-breeds, and a narrator caught in the middle of supernatural shenanigans. I especially like the first paragraph, which really showcases how confused and out of place the protagonist feels as well as hints at the exciting adventures she's about to tell us about.

On to areas that could use some work, I like how you compare humans to wolves/werewolves, but I do wish there was more explanation as to why the narrator believes they are so similar. Also, I was a bit confused in the latter half of the second paragraph when you begin talking about experiments and facilities. The idea you're conveying sounds really exciting! Maybe a clarifying sentence or two could help me understand it more, unless you're trying to keep the topic a mystery.

Also, I found a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes as I read. I've heard a good trick for proofreading is to read the last sentence first, then the second to last, etc. This way, you're brain doesn't autocorrect mistakes, helping you not skip over them. Just to point some out:

sciencetists

I won't tell you what ones are true since I'm still new to this myself.

The night I almost died was a crazy, hecktack night for all those involved. That night I mad several stupid mistakes that coat me dearly.

Ignore this, I made a mistake. Oops!