You've got a few good images here - I really love 'I am a song in minor key,' which is crazy evocative and tells the reader so much about the speaker - but this kind of self-defining poem is a majorly overdone genre. You've managed a pretty original, enjoyable piece of it, but by its very nature it's navel-gazing and totally centered on the speaker, which means that the reader doesn't get very much for it. I think if you took these images and put them into a poem that a stranger might be able to relate to more, you would have something pretty spectacular.
Points: 1090
Reviews: 5
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