"The broken voices often sound the most beautiful." ~ Giullio G.
It wasn't like I asked for this, to be shoved into situations like this. Surrounded by people but alone all the same; screaming at the top of my lungs but never heard.
It wasn't like I avoided making friends, like I didn't want them. Or maybe I didn't? Maybe some part of me, deep down in my subconscious, I shoved people away, kept them at a distance in order to protect myself. It wouldn't be the most shocking thing in the world.
It wasn't like I didn't like food, didn't like to eat. It's not my fault the mere scent of it makes me want to puke and touching it to my tongue could lead me to do so.
It wasn't like I didn't love my family, didn't want to be my brother's best friend like before. Does he hate me? He said so. I don't think I can try and mend the relationship without breaking it even more.
It wasn't like I wanted to be this way, wanted to be a disappointment to my Mother. No, I'm not this way just to go against your beliefs, just to spite you, Mom. I wouldn't.
But I am.
I am a disappointment.
I am the hated sibling.
I am a lack of appetite.
I am shoving people away; keeping myself at arms length.
I am screaming; I am among crowds of people.
I am not being heard; I am not being seen.
And I don't know how much longer I can take it...
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Whoa! Eh, this is the same feeling I'm into now, can totally relate to this. I don't know what to say. It's kind of thing i always feel. you did great job that you wrote it down..
I don't know if you're feeling the same way you've written but if you were, I just hope your those sad feeling has gone by now, time is the best medicine. I really don't know what to say. I would say if this weren't that much relating to me..
It's not a review, perhaps, a comment which has over-eaten
It is REALLY GOOD!
STAY BLESSED!
Hey Katie here!
So to start off with the title really hooked me as a reader! Second, the work was just amazing. Some people would critic the way some parts are worded or phrased but for this particular work it fits well. Every time a situation was said I would feel the emotions from it hit me. I felt sad, upset, frustrated, and that's exactly what ( in this kind of work) you want your readers or critic's to feel. I am sorry though if this is based on events in your life or of someone you know, but here on this website you are not ignored and are not a disappointment just remember that, BUT if its not based on true events then amazing writing job either way! I hope you grace us with another sometime soon!