Young Writers Society

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.

First Impression: So this one was short and not sweet because its horror and all that but the story itself was pretty neat. Definitely a very enjoyable short that you have there. It was a lot of fun to read. Its just really well paced and the descriptions are spot on. The whole thing is just amazing.

Anyway let's get right to it,

I should've known it was Daffy Duck all along. Those black eyes, pinholes in a blanket of white; the black coat, a symbol of darkness and a shining bill, the most important part.

Well okay that's a pretty intriguing way to be opening a story. I'm definitely interested by that opening.

I sat in my living room, waiting waiting, looking at the clock on the wall, its numbers giggled and turned into Daffy’s face, leering, cackling. I wiped tears away, I was scared and daffy new it, I was hallucinating, Daffy seemed to be everywhere, every room burdened Daffy’s shadowing stature.

Well that sounds like a very bad case of paranoia or something else entirely.

My eyes sagged, I had been awake for several days, Daffy wouldn’t get me, I would catch him awake, only then could Daffy be defeated. I stared at the clock again, Daffy was still there, the lamp beside me morphed into Daffy’s Menacing figure.

Oh god this is starting sound more and more like something that could be a pretty interesting horror short film.

I waddled over to the sink and splashed water over my face, I ruffled and felt slightly refreshed. I looked up into the mirror above, red shone in the reflection: blood. Blood washed the living room floor, leading to a corpse that was mangled. On the stomach were the words “Daffy Duck Did It” etched into the now decaying flesh.

Horrifyingly good description that you have there.

My head took up the mirror and for once I saw myself for what I was, face covered in feathers, my eyes pinholes with a bill protruding from my face, the most important part. It was then I truly knew that Daffy Duck did it.

And quite a lovely choice of ending there. Pretty intriguing and definitely very horror appropriate.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

Overall: Overall...I would really love to see someone make a horror short out of this. The way that you've written this is giving me that kind of vibe and that's a really good thing. You've done a wonderful job conveying the emotions and describing the scariness of the situation. Great job with this piece!

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry