Published April 16, 2006
To say goodbye is hard
but it's harder to not.
And what stopped me?
I forgot.
I missed my chance,
more so I miss you.
I didn't say goodbye
now there's nothing i can do.
I'll never get the chance to say it again
and i missed my chance
before the end.
So I'll say it now
the only way i can
I love you and goodbye.
- your biggest fan.
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I love it.
There are only two nit picks I have.
1. Each new line needs to be capitalized. That's just a basic poem-grammar thing.
2. Try to be a little bit more consistent with your repetitive line. Like "Goodbye, Goodbye" and "Hello, hello." They seem to be randomly scattered to me.
Keep up the good work! God Bless!
i think it was very brilliant i think it had a good enough flow as it is i perticuly liked this bit I'll never get the chance to say it again
and i missed my chance
before the end. very nice
Too short.
Too forced.
Too confusing.
AROO!
You need to capitalize that I.... yeah.... heh.
It's a nice poem. I think you might play around with the wording in the third verse to see if you can create a little more of a flow.
The last line seems to me to change the topic too much. The title is "Goodbye", but you haven't said "goodbye" at the very end.
I did like the message in this poem, and I look forward to reading more of your work.