You sat at our crowded dinner table every Friday night
Laughed under the covers with me after dark
We were inseparable from the very start
Now you’re snapping at me
All bark, never any bite
Each week is a brand new fight
My head is spinning
Stomachs always in knots
Nobody is winning this
Neither me nor you
All I’m feeling is dark blue
I’ll miss you never
Though my memories will stay forever
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Hi there, @Swaggy3!
I also had a recent breakup with a very trusted friend; if you'd like to know more, you can read my poem, "Dear Ex Best Friend," if you like!
Friendship breakups are really hard and I'm here if you want to talk about anything!
Now, back to the review!
Praise:
I loved these parts!
These lines create sharp imagery of what your friendship was like! Very relatable!
Critique:
Hmm, now this is alright if you wanted this to rhyme, but.. if you didn't, then I suggest that I will never miss you sounds better, in my opinion!
Also, you could provide more detail about how your friendship ended, what she was like and more memories about the time you spent with her!
I really liked the title tho!
Love,
Queenie