America influenced me
To appreciate our liberties
The sacrifices, pain, and suffering endured
All turned out for the better
America to me
Is the land of the free
And free to be uniquely you
Because diversity is part of America, too
America to me
Is a place of equality
Regardless of sex, race, or ethnicity
America to me
Is the home of the brave
Where people's lives don’t fear the grave
America to me
Is where success reigns supreme,
So anyone can achieve their dream
Many of these freedoms are hard to obtain
With other countries only invested in pain,
To beat their own with the hammer and sickle
And lives tortured by a prickle
America, the land of the free
I’m glad you have rescued me
So,
I'm delighted to say,” I am Free!'
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I'm not an American yet this poem touched me. It reminds me of my own land, where many people fought for the freedom enjoyed now. It's amazing how you express your feelings perfectly through your words. Just one thing, in that line :
I'm delighted to say,” I am Free!'
You could write it as :
I'm delighted to say, "I am Free!"
Hiya Ashlyn here for a review!! Before I dive into it though please know that this review is not intended to offend you or make your writing look bad.
Looks like you have an inconsistent amount of quotation marks there, also there's a bit of spacing issues <33
You perfectly embody the heart of the patriotic spirit here-pain and sacrifice and how our forefathers were determined to make sure it all turned out for the better. I seriously appreciate those lines <33
THANK YOU FOR RECOGNIZING THAT FREEDOM COMES AT A COST <333
I feel like Americans take their freedom for granted, and now days with all the realizations that the founding fathers weren't Gods and owned slaves etc I think most people these days no longer care about everything they went through to make sure this generation would even exist.
Impressive rhyming <333
That concludes this review. I hope you found it helpful, and if not, I hope it at least made you smile <333
-Ashlyn
This is an excellent poem! I could see this in a book of folk poems. I love the tie in of the hammer and sycle as a way to symbolize opressive governments. That was an excellent little touch. The flow of the poem as well is really well done, good flow makes great poems. All in all an excellent, patriotic piece. Absolutely brilliant!
Well said.