I couldn't think of a title for it.

by SuzieCake
  • August 2, 2010
  • Poetry
  • Other

If I could, I would sing you a song,
But I know I’d get it all wrong.
I never could get my words perfect,
Nor could I ever be so direct.

Besides, songs aren’t my artistic style,
But I’d do just about anything to see you smile.
You make my heart pound like a song’s bass
Which, in a way, has me frozen in place.

I can’t remember the last time I felt this way;
Oh, but I know I’ll remember this day.
You know all of the words to say that make me blush,
And I guess that’s why you give me such a rush.

So say that you'll always be
The perfect blend with harmony
To the tale that was deep and untold;
Flick of the pen for these two souls.

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TheModernist
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TheModernist commented · Wed Aug 04, 2010 6:13 am

This was really good, good work. As for a name, if you can't think of one then let it be vague and let it be called "a thought" or some equally vague title or use the date you wrote it or the date you wrote about.

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xxKittyKatxx
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xxKittyKatxx commented · Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:48 am

I enjoyed this poem. Its a bit too happy for my taste,
but I enjoyed it anyways. (: It flowed nicely, and you rhymed almost perfectlly.
I really hope you keep writing, dont doubt yourself.
-KAT

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porter359
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porter359 wrote a review · Tue Aug 03, 2010 9:50 pm

I really enjoyed reading this poem, it has very good flow and emotion. as for a name theres multiple things that it could be.

My True Love
The Way I Love You
Perfect Harmony

the list is endless :)

Good Work,

Porter

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mybrokenreality
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mybrokenreality commented · Tue Aug 03, 2010 4:46 am

I really liked this poem =) It flowed easily and showed emotion. Plus, this is the first piece of work I've read since I created an account, haha.



The tools of conquest do not necessarily come with bombs and explosions and fallout. There are weapons that are simply thoughts, attitudes, prejudices; to be found only in the minds of men. For the record, prejudices can kill, and suspicions can destroy. A thoughtless, frightened search for a scapegoat has a fallout all of its own.
— Rod Serling, Twilight Zone