What a do, What it is. Its yo boi coming at you with a review.
Your poem has deep and meaningful words. I can really tell that you put your heart and soul into to this poem while you were writing it. I really enjoyed reading it.
Although your poem was really good, you still had some problems in it.
The problems that I found was that you didn't capitalize the first letter when you were starting the beginning of the sentence. I also noticed that none of your I's were capitalized. There is nothing wrong with that, but to prevent this in the future from other reviewers I suggest that you do that. (Not trying to be mean in anyway possible way) Also, I want to tell you that you should never start a sentence with "but" or "and". Those to words are only used to separate two conjoining sentences, and they should never be used at the beginning of a sentence.
Besides all that, I still say that your poem was well written. You had a lot of imagery in what you wrote, and you had a lot of figurative language in it. I think that your poem kinda sounded like an excerpt from a story. I feel like it could be transformed into a story if you feel like it, but it is your choice.(Again. That was just what I thought)
Anyway, you don't have to worry about anything that I wrote in this review. Maybe you meant to do all the stuff that I thought was a problem. Who knows(not me). I hope to read more of your poems or other material in the future. Keep up the good work!
~Namjoon~
Points: 1352
Reviews: 21
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