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YAY! First review! Well, what can I say? This is a very good piece of writing. I have virtually no complaints except for a couple of spelling errors. "Lied" should be "laid" and "sifted" is a bit vague. How about "letting the sand run through his fingers"?
I love your use of creative wording. I have never heard "applauding ocean" before but now, I'm ITCHING to use it!
You made the relationships very clear (Summer and Alex are a couple, right?)
But if you are going to use a flashback while the protagationist (sp?) is in the present, then you need to incoporate. You can take away the telling in the beginning of present tense, put it in the beginning, have her look at a photo that brings up the memory and you know the rest.
I LOVE that you didn't bring up the murder until at the very end. It makes me want to chase you with a pitchfork in Science Class until you post another one.
However, this is just ideas. Don't have to use them.
Grade: A-