Hey!
RandomTalks here to leave a quick review,!
I really loved this story that you have introduced here. I liked the voice of narration and I liked how it asked all these questions as if it was directly speaking to you and forcing you to think about it. I think this style of writing has made the story all the more impactful. You have raised an important topic here that many don't stop to think about. War touches all lives and changes it forever in a way so undescribable that you forget what it was like before. I think this is what your story is about, so good job getting the message across.
I liked how you drew attention to those small yet signigicant moment in a battlefield when lives change and end and yet no one is there to witness it. I really liked the overall somber quality of the text and it's gravity, like you know you are reading about something that you will never quite understand, unless you have been there or have been affected by it.
While the first paragraph is more subjective, the second one sets the introduction of the story. I like how you have incorporated it into the text, like narrating an old tale in history.
That's all. This was a really good. I don't know how it fits as a short story, but I really enjoyed reading this.
Keep writing and have a great day!
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