Heya star! More poetry for me to review!!! And oOoOoo a nice format. Let's get started, shall I?
So this poem is longer than the rest so I shall go by stanza- no no, phases of the moon. But before I do that, how could I not love how you had made this into a simple visual with the moon? Your celestial and space themes will never not be beautiful.
Waxing Crescent
So this starts with the notion that you don't think you are beautiful. But you are beautiful so that is a lie <3. But it's a theme that comes back around in the full moon.
I think this perfectly frames how a person it literally afraid of what they have become. And you fear what others will think when the darkness trickles out. It could be because you've only ever been happy, loving, and smiling. But when someone you know for the longest time, sees you without this demeanor, they can be quick to judge why you have been acting "weird" lately. It's just soul crushing to hear and see. <3i am also a coward, being afraid of the dark and the darkness in me...
First Quarter
One part that jumped out at my was how you described yourself as being made out of stars that couldn't shine. It's like you thought of yourself as a defect. Even though this sadness is temporary and this was also 2020, a depressing time for all of us, I think you deserve more hearts <3333. But more onto The First Quarter, you also describe the feeling of not belonging with the line
fragments of a thousand different planets, but none of them are my own
Waxing Gibbous
As the darkness gets smaller, the more you are having to think about your darkness in less words. So this phase is different than the others. You are begging to have some sort of light from the moonbeams when in actuality they are a dim glow. In the other phases you alluded to not liking the darkness and this will be added upon in the future stages.
Full Moon
This one is short and simple, all it says is
It's so simple but in conjunction with the full moon, where the moon is fully glowing, it gives another layer of meaning. The light you are seeing is not a bright strong light where you can see the path you are taking. It is only the glow of the moon providing as much light as you need to not royally screw up. It's like when someone is gaslighting another. They need the bright light to see the lies around them but they coming back to that sickly glow, because that's all they know.maybe i need to love the dark to find the light
Waning Gibbous
Oh no the darkness is back! So here is where you want to learn how to love your darkness. If I had any critique it would be here. You use the word dark, darkness a lot. Maybe something like the deepest of indigo blues could fit. It's dark enough that it almost looks like black but when you look at it up close you see a beautiful blue. Maybe that could be substituted for when you are appreciating your darkness, because you don't see it as darkness.
Third Quarter
So here is where it's "normalized" that being dark, or in real life terms-depressed, is normal and even encouraged. It shouldn't be, though <333. And it plays on "too much of a good thing can be a bad thing." But any of a bad thing is still a bad thing. They are perhaps trying to persuade you in this poem that you need a little bit of sadness to know when the happy times are here, as Bob Ross said.
Waning Crescent
I like this one. It shows the state that big bright stars, or in real life superstars, can also become depressed or succumb to darkness. And those people are beautiful, so the darkness must be beautiful, so you must be beautiful. But star, you're a beautiful human, don't let anyone tell you otherwise. Especially yourself. <33 Another thing I would like to point out is something I learned from uhh Care Bears. I'm going to be paraphrasing a lot. So basically it's like why be happy when you know you're going to be sad later? And that'a what you're touching upon in this phase. "Why have light when it leads to darkness and vise versa."
New Moon
Okay last one! Here is where you are not afraid anymore. You want to explode! And you now know that you have to grow your own light, not source it out from some other person. I just think this is a great ending to this poem. It's one last hurrah till you try to make your own light-happiness. I think the use of the stages of the moon was great. The full moon cycle takes about a month and these feelings you were feeling don't just happen in the span of reading a poem. They happen over days. And I think you conveyed them well.
Okay! That was all for today! I hope you enjoyed. And I hope you found this stuff useful because I had just woken up and wrote this review, and it was a long one. I hope it wasn't too long. Anyway byeeeeeeeeeeee<333
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