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Hello! DragonNoir here for a review!

I must admit, this a really great piece of poetry! I really like the theme you picked and the rhetorical questions you ask; they really make the reader think!
Although, all of this is ruined by the formatting, sadly. I understand that formatting on here can be quite a pain, but maybe you could try using code to help or you could try re-writing the poem into the publishing center. Either way, it's a real shame the formatting is how it is.
As well as that, I have a few things to point out:
"Do you know
You can only
Keep wanting?" Things like this are a bit awkward for the reader, but I understand what you were trying to do. Here, I personally would try to add a comma at the end of the first line and put the last two lines together, but that's just me.
Although the rhetorical questions are very effective, I think you did use a bit too much of them. It's almost like you're relying on them to help the poem's effectiveness. Don't hate me for this, but I think you could try using some other poetic devices, not just rhetorical questions.

Overall, I'd say it's an awesome piece of poetry, but you could try to fix the formatting (although I found it to be almost impossible) and use some more poetic devices to add more variety in the poem.
I hope my review helped!

Hi there, quick thing first of all: I'm not certain, but I think this ought to have a trigger warning. It might be my own experience with friends giving me biased expectations, but it certainly feels like your talking about self-harm and that the "Asking if you want to kill." is about suicide.

Ironically, herein lies my main problem here: clarity. I don't actually know if this is what you're talking about. It's one thing for a poem to have competing interpretations, most do, but I'm struggling to put together one line of thinking for where this could be going at the moment.

It feels like it definitely has something to do with mental health, but that's an enormously wide area. You're asking a bunch of different questions and towards the end, which don't really lead in one direction towards a central focus point. But it can't even be about constantly questioning yourself, because it isn't just questions the whole way through.

You have some interesting ideas, and I feel like your style is aiming for high impact, so I think if you can figure out a consistent, powerful point to make, you have the tools to make something really interesting. Just make sure you're focussed, and remember you can write more than one poem if you have more than one point to make

Hope this helps,
Biscuits