Published June 24, 2026
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for mature content.
I almost remember the way the front door used to sound--
Squeaky and hollow, unnatural and forced.
As if the hinges were too small--
always too small--
Couldn't fit.
Would never fit.
Like nothing was ever right.
So of course they didn't bat an eye when I glued the door shut.
At least it looked normal. It appeared alright.
Who cares what's actually inside, right?
And the hinges would rust--
from the glue--
leaving strands of dried hope and rot to tie a noose
But hey,
the door is closed and that's all that ever mattered anyways.
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ooo this poem is very nice!
line 2: i feel the word force isn't exactly coherent with the theme about conforming since if the door sounded forced and it's supposed to resemble your true self then that would mean your true self was forced, and that's the opposite of a true self. i do like the word unnatural though for this.
lines 3-7: these were my favorite lines! they felt near perfect and the emphasis worked well. it goes from a thought, to always having that thought, to saying it won't and will never change. the progression felt very rhythmic
line 8: so you built up how unnatural and weird this door seems and so you just get tired of it and glue it shut and then no one bats an eye. it kinda seems a bit odd that no one batted an eye because that means they'd have no care towards this action, but i thought about it some more and this works because they never truly cared about the door in the first place.
lines 9-10: these lines were nice and it felt like they were trying to convince themselves it's alright and these contributed to the tone in a good way.
lines 11-13: it shows this door has been shut for a long time and the part most hated in covered in hard to remove rust which can mean that it would be hard to reverse whats been done since its been like that for so long. the glue was an act in the hope of acceptable but they never really wouldve cared about going in the door anyway and those who wouldve wanted to dont have the choice. so this person likely feels lonely and in turn isolated and hopeless because it feels like no one cares because no one has the chance to care.
lines 14-15: the ending feels like the voice from lines 9 and 10 coming back immediately after a moment where the poem goes a little dark to say that none of that matters. the dismissiveness feels like an end and so thats why the ending felt final!
i think this poem was pretty cool and theres not much wrong with it and it has many great moments. keep writing and you have a lot of potential!
Hello!
Firstly, this is really good!!! You used many good techniques, and the words fit well together.
Then, I wonder why this is 16+? I mean, I think that I can understand it well, and I'm, like, 13, but then again I might be missing out on something if so just ignore this!
This is really good: "leaving strands of dried hope and rot to tie a noose" very good litteracy! It also really places the feel of this work, as well as richly adding to it to become a good part of it; well done! I also like how you start with "I almost remember", and how you wrote "Squeaky and hollow, unnatural and forced." Because the repetition of two adjectives is good for the text. It's nice to describe how it is a bit, so the reader knows. 'forced' is a great example of personification!
For "Couldn't fit", I don't really get why and where the hinges can't fit - on the door? Are they mismatched? - unless you mean not the hinges that can't fit, but something else, or someone? Anyways, this confused me a bit.
Maybe also make all of the first-of-the-line letter capitalized, instead of putting capitalization in what seems almost like a random order, or constructing a pattern. For example, why are "from the glue" "leaving strands" and "always too" lowercase when "But hey," "Couldn't fit" and "Squeaky and" uppercase? By the way, I like the casuality of 'But hey,' because usually I don't like it when poems randomly become casual when before they were not, but here it somehow fits!
Last thought: for the title, I would change it to something else than "The Door", to maybe hook the reader better and make it more exciting? Or don't, it's your choice, you're the author!
All in all this was a really nice poem, so thank you for sharing it at YWS!!! Keep writing, have fun and a wonderful day ^^
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it's probably cause of it talking about nooses which implies suicide stuff i guess. also btw the reason the capitalization is like that is because it's being used to help guide the reader where to stop yk. in poetry capitalization can be used in many different ways and it mostly just shows pacing and how you read it in your head. those lines are meant to be read without really pausing as much.
Ok, that makes sense. Thanks!
Good day! You have posted a wonderful poem! Here is a review of my thoughts on your work The Door.
Upon first reading, you do a great job at keeping the tone consistent in this poem. It's a somber poem that highlights a notion of isolation through the use of a door. Furthermore, you couple this with clear imagery that compliments the tone.
These quotes paint that clear image and tone of something dark, lonely, and sad. I love how you mix sound with images and tie them together through the overall message of the poem.
I also enjoy the varying line lengths. This gives an uneasy visual feel to the poem, as the narration feels sharp and pointed in some areas and more loose and unraveled in others, which expresses the narrators own inner conflict of isolation.
Overall, this poem is very well-done! The grammar is consistent, the poem doesn't lose the reader, and it feels complete and thought-out from beginning to end.
Hope you continue to post more of your poetry! Apologies for my short-ish review, I honestly had no critiques to give!