The Eyes

by SparkofLove

Published November 5, 2012

                                                                                     The Eyes
                                                The eyes penatrait into my soul and leave a large hole

                                                   The eyes bore into my heart and leave some marks

                                                    The eyes dig through my mind and make me rewind

                                                                   The blue makes me paralized
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Chrisoh99
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Chrisoh99 commented Comment · Feb 24, 2013

Hey..
What I learned from this poem is that love never vanishes even if two are very far from each other/ they lost each other
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Nice poem, but you spelled penetrate wrong ! :P

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brittbritt12347
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brittbritt12347 commented Comment · Feb 24, 2013

Brittany here to review.

First off, in the first sentence you spelled "penetrate" wrong. I don't quite understand where the blue comes in but okay lol have a good night.

Happy Writing!

writingmyheartout wrote a review Review · Nov 5, 2012

Very nice, symbolic. You spelled penetrate wrong, but other than that nice overall. I think your words and the lines could flow a little more smoothly. It should feel like a river or running water when you read it. Unless it's a different kind of poetry. But I did like it, keep writing.. I'm interested to dee what other things you may write.

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SirenCymbaline
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SirenCymbaline commented Comment · Nov 5, 2012

That's pretty good, and nicely symbolic.

(Also, it's spelt 'penentrate.')



Worry does not empty tomorrow of its sorrow, it empties today of its strength.
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