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The Little Mermaid

by SoullessGinger


Slender waist and dainty hands,

Sparkling eyes and amber hair,

A musical muse yearning for life upon the sands.

A dream role for any girl, simple and fair. 

Before the panel stands a doe eyed damsel,

With a waist too thick to cast,

her hopeful thoughts will soon come to a standstill,

Her princess aspirations to be a thing of the past.

Her voice rings clear and strong;

A perfect match for the brave mc.

Her hair is curly, copper, and long,

“But you just don’t match the aesthetic, unfortunately.”

An understanding smile,

Well practiced and prepared,

Rises to her tired face for a while.

She’d dreamed as far as she had dared.


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Wed Oct 06, 2021 3:30 pm
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SadboyJay wrote a review...



hi i im just giving you a review on what i read on this good lovely poema talking about the little mermaid

so lets get started

First off i know poems like these about a little Mermaid cause i watch one of them on disney and the got the same thing from the movie on what you got in the poem and also what made you wanna make a poem about a little Mermaid you could come up with something

My Compliment is you doing a movie about the little Mermaid in your theater like you doing a musical or something cause thats what you saying maybe

How you can improve is this is giving me theater vibes is the way you said what you said in the poem thats what i im saying cause i can tell what musicals be like when people make words like this


Keep writing and have a nice day!! ~jay~




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AilahEvelynMae wrote a review...



Hi there, Ellie here with a quick review!!

I really enjoyed reading this. This gave me such flashbacks to my musical theatre days. :)

It flows very well and one thing I noticed is your ability to to use imagery. Your use of descriptive colours and such helps a lot and helps me see what is happening.

The last section is my favourite!

“But you just don’t match the aesthetic, unfortunately.”

An understanding smile,

Well practiced and prepared,

Rises to her tired face for a while.

She’d dreamed as far as she had dared.

Especially the last line, I just love it because it’s so relatable <3

Wishing you all the best!
-Evelyn-Mae <3




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Emivanz1 wrote a review...



wow, this just screams feeling, I have no words (but I do because this is a review, duh, so I'm going to say them)

Glows
I LOVE all the descriptions, In my head, I can clearly see this girl's determination and disappointment.
I LOVE the standstill part of the poem in the lines,
her hopeful thoughts will soon come to a standstill,

"Her princess aspirations to be a thing of the past.

Her voice rings clear and strong;

A perfect match for the brave mc.

Her hair is curly, copper, and long,"

it gives the sensation of holding your breath, exactly how you feel right after an audition.

I LOVE the message, I have had this happen to me and I totally understand it.

I love your poem, keep writing!!
your friend
Emivanz




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Tue Sep 21, 2021 1:37 am
SoullessGinger says...



My computer is not letting me put spaces in between the stanzas and it is driving me CRAZY, so sorry about that!!





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