Lovely poem! I especially liked the first verse..and the clever little twist at the end. 
Good job 
Water
Water comes,
Water goes.
Water doesn’t stand still,
It flows
It makes me happy,
It brings me joy.
I sit at the edge,
And write a song.
A song about love,
A song about you.
I scribble for hours,
Frustrated and angry,
Finally it’s finished,
Finally, I am happy,
I stand up
and pack my bags,
when all of a sudden
The paper slips out of my hand.
It lands on your surface,
That crystal clear surface,
I pick it up to my shock to see,
That all the letters have flee.
Damn…
Damn…
Damn…
I hate the water.
Lovely poem! I especially liked the first verse..and the clever little twist at the end.
Good job
That shared a lot of meaning behind it.
Very creative and I enjoyed reading it.
Keep up the great writing!
My immediate though after this poem was; OH NO! QUICK GET THE PAPER! Hehe
I loved this, the imagery was really good and the flow was continuous, which made it a fabulous read. A good and funny twist towards the end.
Fangala the Flying Feline wrote:Strangely beautiful. Simple, yet packs a punch. Full of sharp imagery and emotion. I don't have any complaints about this poem. Keep up the good work!
Strangely beautiful. Simple, yet packs a punch. Full of sharp imagery and emotion. I don't have any complaints about this poem. Keep up the good work!
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