Heeey I'm here to hunt memories but mostly to review this story~
This is my thoughts on the stories and it's all honest.
Grammar? I don't do reviews on that. I review content.
NEXT!
The writing style is something I admire in works because it defines the author. This has a good writing style, and the fantasy world is really amazing, however I may not be the targeted audience. But I have to admit, the writing style is what got me hooked.
The thing I felt was not for me was the 'telling'. I'm not sure but I prefer stories that show readers what's happening/what things are rather than telling them. Though, you can 'tell' the readers, it's just not what I prefer, I guess.
No matter how much I try to not include this in my review, I'm going to include it anyways. The writing style got me hooked and all that jazz because I was interested in this story and what is in it (I like fantasy stories. They were the first stories I liked. Ever), but the long paragraphs kept pushing me away. I know, people have already said that, but I just wanted to tell you how I feel.
Now, no matter what I say, please keep on writing. I want to see more of your writing because things like this make me admire the writing world even more. People like you inspire me to improve my own writing and my voice. I'm still having trouble finding mine, and you just gave me some boost to start working on it.
I hope you write stuff that reveals your voice more. I like it. Please. :3
Points: 104
Reviews: 77
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