Published November 16, 2011
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I agree with the other comments that it was a really imaginative way how you compared a man to a puppet. I have never read anything like this before and I really really really liked it! It had sone amazing imagery in it. I could imaging everything so clearly, and basically, I thought that this poem was genius. I especially love these particular lines in the poem-
I just thought that this was the most perfect comparison between a puppet and a man. It speaks to me as how a man is being controlled under others like a puppet, and along the way, he forgot and turned behind his dreams. This truly was a fabulous poem. It was something new I've read, and I'm glad I dis. I look forward to reading more of your work!The first line of each stanza were very good. The repetition added to the poem. I love your comparison between man and puppet. I think it does say quite a lot. The way you describe the puppet is as if it is coming to life. Then you transfer to talking about man. Very good! I would just watch your capitalization. Each line of a stanza should be capitalized. All in all, great poem!
I thought that the comparison between a man and a puppet was very original and neat! I loved the wording used to describe the smaller details! The only two mistakes I found are the verb tenses... maybe catch instead of caught and wear instead of wore? But otherwise, this is a great piece!
Keep writing!
~Chezka