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Wow, you are such a good poet! The way you presented your opinions to the reader through this poem is so good. The use of rhyming words and repetition of the lines "These are your thoughts" and the part of your thoughts being different made the poem very powerful. All those examples about the difference between the sun and the moon and the conflicting views between different people were presented in a creative manner. My favorite part in the poem was-

"Does the wind have to drive out the clouds,
Leaving the sun to stay.
Why is the sun so loved,
when the clouds give a much cooler day
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These are your thoughts,
Mine are much different
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The need of all the seasons for the existence of human beings is emphasized upon in this part of the poem. I loved it because it shows us that no matter how different our views may be, the opinion of every person must be taken seriously for the society to be peaceful and progressive. The poem also portrays the individuality and uniqueness of the people. I simply loved it! I also want to tell you that even though English is not my mother language, I guess there were a few grammatical errors in the poem, which will hopefully be fixed soon by you. Anyways, the mistakes can be ignored as minor flaws in a brilliant literary piece. Keep up the good work!

Well, it seems we meet again in another one of your poems. Let's get right down to it! My word will have a ^ next to it.

The sunshine is a glorious gift

I'm sorry the moon has to take it's shift

Right off the bat, my Grammarly noticed that the wrong type of it's was used. The correct form should be*its*

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These are my thoughts,

Yours are much different

^ I don't have much to say about this one. The rhyming goes along nicely and I didn't see any mistakes. But I really wish people in this society would know that, though.

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The beautiful moon waits all day to rise

Why can't the sun just drop from the sky

^Yeah, same. The night is so peaceful. But you forgot a comma in the first sentence there. I would say keep it consistent.
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These are your thoughts,

Of to which I am indifferent

^After reading this, I was confused. Normally I read poems out loud and read I read this line, I was a tiny bit bamboozled. This section, unlike the others, doesn't have any rhyming. I suggest changing that to keep the rhyming consistent.

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Does the wind have to drive out the clouds,

leaving the sun to stay

Why is the sun so loved,

when the clouds give a much cooler day

^I like this section the best. I relate to this a lot. It also has no mistakes as far as Grammarly can see, and it's a bit longer than the other sections, making it a bit more interesting.

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These are your thoughts,

Mine are much different.

^Again with the rhyming, try to keep it persistent.

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Does the clouds have to claim the whole sky,

for they are so grey and gloomy

Why can't the clouds depart,

leaving the sun in the sky so roomy

^This one doesn't bother me much, but does should be do, and grey should be gray.
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These are my thoughts,

Of to which you are indifferent

^The no rhyming here is getting a bit repetitive, making it annoying a bit. I would suggest changing thoughts to a synonym that would be easier to rhyme with.

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We are about as alike as the sun and moon.

^Love this line.

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Your thoughts I am indifferent to,

For I am quite different from you

^Again, love this line.

Keep writing! You'll most likely see me in one your newest poems, so goodbye for now.
~gxldencrxwns

Ok, so right off the bat, I find the grammar in this poem, specifically in the capitalisation of words, is rather inconsistent and random, as much as I try, I cannot see a rhyme or reason to them. Also there are some punctuation mistakes (or what I assume are mistakes), and as a whole, these mistakes, including the capitalisation, detract from the reading experience greatly, as one is left in an awkward limbo, wondering if the effect achieved was intended or not. Also, the themes here are explored a bit too superficially, taking the sun and the moon and just presenting them as an average observer would, in my head, a poet has to find new ways to present the same ideas, find the diamond in every lump of coal, and while the criticism here was more personal, I still feel further works could use a bit more depth.

As for the good things in the poem, the structure was a nice touch that didn't feel repetitive, as it always changed just enough for it to remain fresh. The rhyme give the poem a nice jumpy rhymth which made the poem seem very song like, which helped convey the emotions of the poem.

With nothing else to say, I retire myself. Salutations.