Young Writers Society

Hey there Snazzy!!
I really like that name though!
So I started reading this poem, hoping with my fingers crossed that this would rhyme. And it does!! Boy, oh Boy! does it rhyme. Even the half rhymes are very effortless.
The poem,(as stated by previous reviewers) is very humorous.
Well I hope you are not allergic to paper; we don't want to lose a good writer to Paper.
Have a good day!!
Cheers!
Alex Blackwell..

Hey.

A very relatable and humorous piece. The twist you threw at us in the last stanza really made the poem. A couple little things: the letters i and t in stanza three should be italicized. And in the last stanza "they" in line 2 modifies doctor, so a singular pronoun should be used. And the last thing is just my opinion but I would try restructuring stanza 2-especially lines 2&3. When I read it aloud those two lines just didn't flow as smooth as the rest of the piece. Enjoyed this piece. Keep writing!

groganbabygirl

So this starts off and you are thinking, "Just another kid saying that they are allergic to homework."
But this is not the case with your work of art here, you have writtin an extremely funny poem about a topic of common interest. The comedy here is evident! I love how you write down different reactions to different subjects. Your rhyming pattern is one of my favorites, it flows smoothly together like a mixture of honey and milk. The vocab you used is good, simple, but not so simple it is boring. This is The Best poem about homework ever written, I look forward to reading more of your work!

Great job and keep on writing!

Hey hey SnazzyPencil :3 le BornLoser is here to review this poem ^.^

This is a very humorous poem! For the duration of it, I thought that you were exaggerating reasons why you can't do homework, so that you could get out of doing it, but it turns out that the whole time you were telling the truth about your reactions, it's just that you were allergic to paper! XD

The flow and rhyming structure of the poem go so well together, and that makes me happy ^.^ it's always great to find a funny poem that has a nice flow to it

I feel like the little squiggle things that look like this ~ aren't really necessary, as you could just leave a blank line. The reader would probably get the idea that you're trying to spilt up the verses by just leaving blanks between them

Overall, a really great poem! Well done dude!

Keep writing!

Mega huggles, from BornLoser :3

But if you're allergic to paper, then you can't hold sheet music.

lol. hilarious! That's pretty much how I feel about school. A bit graphic though...

Hi Snazzy! I love this poem because I share the dislike of homework too Anyway I guess I'll start.

Flow: The flow of your poem is great; the way it rhymes, but also the way it goes from each part to the next like:

"Whenever I start to dot my i's

or begin to cross my t's,

my eyes bulge right out of their sockets,

and then I'll start to sneeze!

~

Don't take out the grammar,

'cause then I'll stop breathin'.

Please not the algebra,

you'll then find me heavin'."

Creativity: I also love the creativity of different parts of homework like algebra, grammar, and spelling. Another great part was the plot twist where the whole time I actually thought you were allergic to homework, but then at the end it turns out you're allergic to paper! XD

Over all I think you did an awesome job writing this! I saw you fixed well to swell, but I also noticed that you changed "it's like I'm being stung by bees!" to "and then I'll start to sneeze!" which I thought was great!

-smartdog

Hey, this is Kman134 here to review your work.

Well, to be frank, I thought this was a nice piece of work; it had such a dark humorous edge in each sentence. I loved how each sentence expressed the narrator's allergic reaction and i loved what kind of symptoms occur in his/her allergies.

"Anytime I solve math problems,

or begin to punctuate,

my arms well to twice their size-

it's my body's terrible fate."

Despite there being a grammar error in this sentence--well, instead of swell--the symbolism was pretty useful and the remark on mathematics and how it makes your arm swell is the same way i feel when doing equations.

"Finally I went to the doctor-

they said my allergies would taper.

But I still have to do school work

turns out I'm allergic to paper"

This revelation at the end was pretty much a brilliant twist where the narrator thought he/she was allergic to homework but, in reality, it was the paper that the homework was printed on, which is pretty rare to have an allergic reaction to.

To sum it all up, this was an interesting, yet comically enticing, poem and would like to read more of your works in the future.

Haha! Pure genius!!! Yet another great work from Snazz <3

Hey Snazzy!
I guess I'm going to do the more critical things first, then tell you what I thought of it overall.

my arms well to twice their size-

my eyes bulge right out of their sockets
it's like I'm being stung by bees!