Published December 16, 2004
Dark sucking up life
Black overpowering love
Empty cheerless smiles.
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Not that you'll ever see this review, but I stumbled across it and thought it was worth reviewing anyway. I really like it. It was dark and beautiful and meaningful. Though I have to agree with faith, love can be just as dangerous. Lovely for a haiku, though
the first line wasn't anything special in my opinion, but i rather life the image of 'black overpowering love', because its in contrast to our normal views of love as a happy pink fluffy thing. that line reminds us that love can be something perverted and dangerous too. the third line again evokes an image consistant with the second line, though its not as provocative.