… ‘Guess you thought he’d killed me? Well so did I. But the stupid bloodsucking twit, had other ideas. He didn’t want me dead – but undead was okay. His boss would kill him if he killed me. But he was pretty annoyed at me for trying to kill him. Wouldn’t you be too? I have to admit that he was okay to look at – bearing in mind he’s eight thousand years old. Well at least his mind is eight thousand years old… I don’t know how to explain it really… Well he’s a vampyre – and because of him so am I.
That means outliving my family, and that – that’s what hurts the most. But I’m going to do what they want me to do (don’t ask I have no idea either) and I’m going to learn the ways of the vampyre. I’m going to learn how to kill a vampyre. Before you say it – the sun frying us up and turning us into dust? Nope that’s a myth. Stake through the heart? Myth too. And slicing off the head… ‘Hmmm’ I’ll have to try that, although knowing my luck – the asshole won’t die and I’ll be stuck with his forever jabbering head for all eternity.. Luv-er-ly…’
its a bit useless and if anyone has any comments (I really do not care what they are - Freedom of speech... USE IT!) but i'm kinda stuck on what to do next so any ideas will be real helpfull xxx PM me if you have any
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okayy....well this is definitely something that leaves you with a couple of thoughts this one. The main character certainly seems to be a pretty intriguing person here, whose got quite a strong personality there towards the world and it is definitely something that tends to engage you although this is one of those situations where its a little more hit and miss where this protagonist might also in parts come off as a little rude.
There also seems to be some interesting backstory there to this person especially with the bits of information that we do be getting towards the very end of that. At any rate, it is all going towards making this whole situation even more intriguing so there's not really anything to be complaining about there.
On the whole, it is actually a fairly solid piece this one. Perhaps not the most eloquent and in need of a bit of polishing here and there but for the most part its actually a pretty intriguing story here and I do find myself curious to see what happens next here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
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Harry