Published May 11, 2011
Have you seen
The tree-rimmed meadow
Blanketed in snow?
Will you tell me where it is?
I seem not to know.
Do you know
The ancient oak
Standing all alone?
Will you tell it for me,
I remember what it'd shown?
Can you remember
The Northern lights
Dancing across the sky?
Take a picture, give it to me,
Maybe I then can finally say goodbye.
[Please give me any feedback! Thanks 
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Konnichiwa, Silver! (I do not speak Japanese, but I guessed at spelling that...)
I don't know a lot about poetry. Just that this was really good! Beautiful, really. Very short. And you know what short means? This Chiquita can't gather up any tips on this other than to keep writing:)
--Lollipopper
Thank you guys for the excellent reviews!
I had experimented a bit with different words for both the title and the ending. "Good-bye" sort of slipped my mind. I think that fits, though, so thanks!
I don't think I'm going to add any more (I can't think of anything else to add!).
I like this. It's short, sweet, and beautiful.
I do agree with this statement, though. "Good-bye" would probably sound better. Other than that, though, this was really amazing! Great job!
I like this. Short, concise, nostalgic imagery. The only thing I have to say is, you should change "bye" (in both title and poem) to "goodbye". Bye makes the end choppy, abrupt, awkward. Goodbye is not only more formal, but sounds better rhythmically.
Short, sweet, and to the point! I thoroughly enjoyed this, really it was wonderful. The imagery and descriptions are breathtaking, it painted a very clear and vivid image in my mind. Truly, this is one of the more simple yet beautiful writes I've read as of late. Thank you for choosing to share this with the rest of us. Wonderful job and good luck on your future writes.
I reall liked this, I thought it was nice and simple, you didn't need a whole lot to put an image in my mind and to let me know what you were feeling, a skill that I reall envy. I agree that you could probably add some more verses to it, but it depends. Keeping it like this will have a nice, simple feeling to the poem, adding more will give it more depth and more structure. So it's totally up to you. I also loved that I couldn't find any punctuation mistakes, you took a bit of editing off my hands
Keep up the good work, maybe try writing a story about these same images? If you do, please let me know
Konnichiwa Silver,
Looks like I'll be reviewing your poem!!! Yays!!1 Hehe I'm Soulkana and here it goes!!!
First I thoroughly enjoyed this!! Nice emotion and descriptions. It paints a very awesome picture in my head ^^. I think you could add a lot more to this....just to make it even more beautiful than it is now!! Describe some more things I say....but it is good just as it is now!! So not saying you have to or anything, its just a suggestion...however this was great and I loved it very much.
I will keep an eye out for more of your works so Buena Suerte. Happy Writing and Best of Wishes. Sayonara and keep up the awesome job. This was a very well thought out poem to me and I can't wait to read more ^^.
Soulkana<3