Published May 25, 2012
I was in development of a Flash game. I am learning action script and i thought that i could make a quick demo of a turn based RPG game. My intentions were to have little to no story line but just to be entertaining. Most of those types of games are all dialogue.
Visually on the screen there would not be much movement and "pop up" dialogue boxes will appear to indicate them talking.
This is basically me just babbling but even I giggled once or twice through it. I would like your thoughts.
Don't mind the punctuation and spelling mistakes. you can probably tell that i wasn't worried about it.
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Starting scene
Castle
Heros are in front of the king
King: I’ve summoned you all here because there is an emergency.
Hero: what’s the emergency?
King: its my son, Prince Es.
Hero: wait what? Your son is a princess?
King: no that’s not what I said. My son is missing.
Hero: who’s your son?
King: Prince Es.
Hero: WTF. OK, so your son the princess is missing. What do you want us to do about it?
King: find him of course.
Hero: sounds easy enough. What’s she look like?
King: Its not a she it’s a he.
Hero: so “she looka like a man”?
King: yea she, I mean, he looks like a man.
The maid runs in.
Maid: My liege.
King: yes, what is it?
Maid: we found your son!
Hero: you found the princess?
King: great where is he?
Maid: It isn’t good my liege. Prince Es is, he is dead.
King: What?! How can this be? Where did you find him?
Maid: well sir. We found him in his closet.
Hero: poor bastard. He died before he had a chance to come out of the closet.
King: watch your tongue.
Hero: What, It's pretty obvious. His name was princess after all.
King: How did he die?
Maid: well sir, from the looks of it your son was into erotic affixation.
Hero: so he overdosed on Viagra?
Hero 2: no you idiot that’s erectile dysfunction.
Hero: Oh then what’s the thing that she said?
Hero 2: it’s where you choke yourself to the point of passing out right before you climax.
Hero: Oh… so he was trying to choke the chicken but the chicken won.
Maid: I found him hanging in the closet with his pants around his ankles.
Hero 3: Insert David Karadine joke here.
Hero: OK… um…
Hero 3: dude your not supposed to actually make a joke. Saying insert “this” here is the joke.
Hero: no wait I got one. I guess he really did have a Kung Fu grip.
Hero 3: you’re an idiot
Hero: and this is what happens when a ninja tries to masturbate.
Hero 3: dude stop
Hero: to bad he wasn’t in McGyver instead. This never would of happened.
King: enough.
Hero: what. Im just saying, all he would of needed was a paper clip and he would of gotten out of that jam. easy
King: Well, since my son was… found, I don’t require your assistance.
Hero 2: well this was a waste of time. See ya.
King: Well there is something of much less importance that you can do for me.
Hero: what’s that?
King: The demon king J.J. stole something very valuable from me. His tribe lies to the north in the Forest.
Hero: might as well. We are already here.
King: it is very dangerous. so be careful
The heros leave
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IP address:
Canary word: Present
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Aqua here! XD
basically sexually deprived *snicker* xD
Honestly, I loved reading this. I wished I could read more. The part where they think he's a Princess but then everyone gets confused and then the maid comes in and says he's dead cause he was
Spoiler
I didn't mind the spelling mistakes at all! Dude good job! I get crazy over them mistakes! XD
The confusing thing was the King's reaction. At first, he was shocked to hear of the prince's death but then, he was like, "Oh my gosh, so embarrassing...let's get there's heroes out of here..." No extra consideration at all! XD
The heroes were awesome. Especially hero 1. I love his character! XD
Keep writing! I hope to see more from you! ^u^
Brittany here to give a review.
Well it was funny, but I sort of don't get the point.
Not trying to be rude but I just didn't understand a lot of what was going on.
Maybe try explaining the situation a little better.
Anyways, have a good night.
Happy writing!
Hahaha!
I totally get what this type of script is for as I've played quite a few online games in my day, and it works perfectly. Not TOO obtrusive, and not too extensive. Although, putting myself in the perspective of the "gaming" audience, I would be a bit pissed that it went on so long. If you've ever played: "Battalion: Nemesis" this script is exactly the level of humour found in that game, and for a laid-back, casual time waster it worked perfectly - although gameplay was ALWAYS the main focus.
So to conclude, as a nice add-on to what would otherwise be a story-less game, I'd say you excelled ^_^ I giggled a few times reading it, too, so that'd keep some of the younger audience coming back, I'd guess - although, not knowing your adudience, the sex jokes might be a bit too much for them. Other than that, it's excellent!
The Hero 1,2,3 names might be a little disorienting. Sorry. I never even bothered to give them any sort of names. This was all, kind of, "on the fly".