Published January 25, 2012
You haven't felt freedom 'til you've danced in the rain,
suffered through pain and had it taken away.
You haven't been taught 'til your bridges have burned,
repeated mistakes that you should have had learned.
You can only win first place if you run the race, and even if you fall,
get up, stay going, keep up with the pace.
You haven't lived 'til you're faced with the fight,
to venture and strive for your right to survive.
When you have, you will know.
Your wisdom will grow, and the sights of your future will gleam and glow.
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Heya Sista
Nice poem. 
But wait, :O
Should be:
Just a little nitpick
Also what that guy said about apostrophes.
But you're grand. This was really good.
Thank you Zly!
Yeah I knew I had made a mistake on that part, I wasn't sure if the apostrophe should be 'til or til'. Thanks for clearing that up, much appreciated
My grammar is generally good, though I make a lot of mistakes when I try to piece bits together.
I will go and edit now.
Hay Shauna! Zly Quill here to review!
Put that apostrophe before the word til, so it reads 'til.
Take out that period..
EDIT: In telling you to take out that period, I accidentally put a stray one in my post. Hehe. Woops.
This was very good; short, sweet, simple, and to the point. It was quite pretty and quite meaningful, and I did really enjoy it. Just work on your grammar and you should be set to go.
Send me a PM or post in my reviewing thread if you ever want a review again!
Love & Blessings,
Zly Quill