Published July 18, 2009
"Fear the Future"
INTRO:
A sure, to me uncertain glow,
We talk in whispers-they'll never know-this.
CHORUS:
I fear the future, fear the future,
But I live for tomorrow,
I wont hide away.
VERSE 1:
Trap my finger in the door,
Blame that guy whos not to blame,
Im all at odds though even so,
A knocked-on tree it fails to show...
For me.
VERSE 2:
But then... you land a kiss upon my brow,
A touchless smile I do deny-
A shiver rides across the fore....arm myself,
A wall I'll form.
VERSE 3:
A gentle picnic in the sun,
Snakes and ladders just for fun,
I climb on up within my mind,
To slide my hand down beside...
Yours.
CHORUS:
I fear the future, fear the future-
But i live for tommorrow,
I wont hide away. (x2)
OUTRO:
And I cant find the reasons today...
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Nice try with the song. It is nice.
General Things
I like this little line at the end.
Rhyme and Rhythm
You used a nice rhyme scheme. It wasn't to rhymey and it wasn't not at all rhymey. It was just fine. It sounded pretty good overall.
I think everything flowed pretty well. I was able to hear the song in my head very clearly. It sounded really nice.
Overall
I like the topic you chose for the song. It was good.
I thought you did a nice job and you presented it well, it flowed well. Good Job.
It was a pretty good song.
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- Anshita
This song was okay for me. I don't know why but I felt like heard this some where. Also you don't have to tell us if it is verse or chorus we can figure that out. The point of the song was pretty good but it was short for me and undone. Sorry but I would give you 3 out of 5 stars. But try a little bit harder and I think that you lyrics will be cool.