Young Writers Society

Now I need to write a review on this majestic piece of art.

I loved every part of it, It reminded me not to give out my personal information . This is also written in a way that makes it feel nostalgic but it really isn't. Great work ✨

- Cher

I love it! If you give a mouse a cookie, it'll bankrupt you with its need for a constant supply. If you give a website permission to use cookies, it'll bankrupt you through peer pressure to buy things you don't need (like cookies for a certain little mouse which has been secretly using your computer). Either way your wallet is doomed ^^

Heyo ShadyVypy! I totally could not resist the urge to review this satirical beauty, so here I am :3

Concept wise, plot wise, content wise, this whole thing is 10/10. I love the use of alternating font sizes, and also the mega dramatic accompanying images - they work together to create the vibe that the story is taking itself very seriously, but in a satirical way, if that makes any sense at all. I have actually never read the original version of this? Whoops - so I can't really comment on how good a parody it is in that regard. But taking it on its own, it stands up by itself quite well which I think is an important marker for any good parody/spin-off.

I really really love the photos you've chosen, especially of the lego person and the little girl with all the hands pointing at her. Like she's 100% about to be peer pressured into buying something by all those disembodied arms.

Nitpick wise, I just had a couple of small notes~

If you give a company your email,
they're going to ask to enable unnecessary cookies.

Then the bigger corporations will begin stalking you,
to make sure they don't miss anything.

Hey there ShadowVyper, R33SE here for a review!!

Spoiler! :

And chances are if they begin listening to your conversations again, they're going to want to give another company your email.

I did notice that you broke the string at the end here. Whereas, in the original book, the story comes full circle and ends with a final sentence that is the exact reverse of what it began with, it "cookie, wants milk" to "milk, wants cookie", your ending differs in that it does not directly reflect how the story began. A simple thing, but perhaps a necessary fix were you to ever shoot for a New York Times Bestseller

wow... too true.

Amazingly done. I Love the way you made it graphic and screaming. The font is so big, I got scared even haha. Great job!

i cri so beautiful

the variation in the text size for emphasis is the best part of this 10/10

Wow. What a masterpiece.

This is amazing. I love it... golden