A short little love story, maybe a little cliche, but alas, it's a love story. Only the best can pull it off, and a rare stroke of luck. I assume I am neither!
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I sat on the hill,
waiting...
Wind whirled through the leaves,
of the trees
the birds came,
The sun sat in the distance,
slowly setting.
I looked around
and sighed.
She was coming back?
No.
Seven this morning,
she was coming home;
or so we thought.
Now nine at night.
She never came back,
maybe I'll me her before she meets me;
past the seas and through the clouds?
I sat up, then removed my shirt,
set it upon the ground beneath me.
Lying down,
the sun set it's final rays across my nude chest.
The warmth it gave me reminded me of her;
her arms wrapped tight around me...
The soft lips that would touch mine...
A tongue of sorts licked my cheek,
Opening my eyes, I saw not my love,
but a companion,
my dog.
We sat, and waited.
And she came.
Bare feet ran up the hill,
I looked toward its origin.
And there she was, my love.
We hugged and kissed.
My buddy leaped at us,
Jealous perhaps!
We sat and watched the sunset fall below the horizon.
Here the day was ending, but somewhere,
it had just began.
We talked, my dog at my side.
Rain fell at the last light,
a calm noise in the leaves.
All three of us cuddled together;
Awaiting a future tomorrow (I think this fits better, what do you think?)
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In your reviews, not only critique, but the one thing I really would like to know is your emotions. Tell me the atmosphere you get, the "distance" of the sounds, are they near you, or in a faraway distant land? This isn't that emotion packed I guess, but just bear with me, thanks! 
It is nothing special, and it doesn't portray my feelings at all. If it portrayed my feelings(and thoughts), you would have nightmares and I'd be put in a mental hospital! 
Not to mention you'd be utterly baffled.
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I actually thought this wasn't cliche at all. It was cute. Everyone pretty much said what i was going to other than that great job. Keep Writing!!
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I actually really like this, it seems good to me. And the atmosphere of this poem reminds me somewhat of the beach. The calmness and the descriptions. I love it!!!! I love this part:
I think that you should write more like it, but who cares what I think. (:
Hey, overall a nice poem. But I have to admit it was only nice, if not a little cliche. There was nothing really stand out about this, there is only the surface nothing deeper everything is told not show. But maybe that's because I look at love with disdain, never have being in it my self and only seeing it bring misfortune and stupidity to others ( yes, I have issues).
Missing letters!when I read this poem I had a feeling of distance, of waiting. Yet for some reason i felt close to the subject, as if i where watching them. The second happy ending bit was, well happy. I preferred the first bit my self, the language was nicer alot smoother. The second bit it falls into colloquialisms as if the narrator had let go a bit, the emotional weight lifted. I'm not sure if this is good or bad.
unnecessary, sound's a bit to twilightly.
I quite like this line, maybe instead you should talk about the warmth of the light rather than the cheats of a half naked man. Is nude really necessary?
Us? But then it wouldn't sound right...
I just don't like this.
Sorry, I've been such a troll. This is genuinely a good poem. You get the emotions across quite well.