Something not working for my life
people telling me all these lies
wasting away, what a suprise
what all alone outside.
The chorus
The sun is shinning, but not for me
the sky is blue, grey to me
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That's just the start and chorus
me and my friend wrote it
and i don't got the whole thing
memorized yet.
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I think this wou;d be better as "sxomething's not working in my life"; to me personally it reads better.
I liked this I can't wait for u to have the rest of the song on here.*sits on a bench and waits*
This is good, too short to really critque but you should have this part like this:
CHORUS
The sun is shinning, but not for me
the sky is blue, grey to me"
Insted of:
"The chorus
The sun is shinning, but not for me
the sky is blue, grey to me"
Can't wait to read the rest