An Angel's Omen

The silence echoes as if you are not.
But no matter what, I shall face the sinful lot.
I will show all the forces, that even one man,
Has the willpower that proves he can.
And love it seems is almost lost.
For our hearts grow weary in the deafening frost.

The life we know may be bitter, but save another day.
Because tomorrow may not come, our love would just decay.
If I look not like I possess faith,
Then let me assure you, I am not tempted by that wraith.
For the morrow speaks with effervescent call,
That even the fearless shall soon fall.

Who am I but a man?
But what I bestow upon all is my plan.
I speak to the Earth and its seven seas!
Bring the sinners to their knees!
The morrow lives in flesh and blood.
The angels have sung that I am no dud.

Foolish all of you! Humans alike!
You haven’t a clue about his Fourth Reich!
To take over the heavens, the seas, the skies,
Not just this realm, but the others by lust bound lies.
Do not ever fret.
For sin is not what I beget.

So take heed through the silence and its toll!
The winds of knowledge may steal your soul!
Not unless you find the true light.
Not the star, but Heaven, so bright.
Do not trust his silver tongue.
Soon to be here, the warning I’ve sung!

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Demora
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Demora wrote a review · Fri Jun 21, 2013 2:17 pm

Wow is all I can really say, no scratch that I have no words. You've stolen them from my lips after reading this piece. This is just to extravagant for the any words, I could really feel what the narrator was saying too it was very powerful. Just loved this now I'm going to check your others and see if they also steal my words.

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xxxXanthexxx
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Hey,

Just to say, i love the title of this :). There is not a bit of this i dont like. I love the emotion and the topic. I dont normally read poetry much but this is amazing. It flows together nicely and i understand what it is about perfectly. A beautiful piece. :)

Great work!

Damn mate, your talent is scary! Flow, grip, power, sophistication, this had it all. I also loved the title: "An Angels Omen" So profound! Utter brilliance mate, I can't really nit pick at anything in particular, because it's been done so well. Great job. Keep it up!

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JudyG710
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Well said Skay. I agree, except for the flow thing. I liked the flow of it. But that is just my opinion. Great job with this mi Pateessa! Your poems are always deep and emotional, but most of all, they are all really great to read. I can't wait to read your next one. XD Keep writing, and may the Force be with you, mi Pateessa! <3

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Skay13 Comment

I really liked this alot, it's a great work and I enjoyed reading it. The only problem I could come up with is sometimes the flow threw me off. Other than that, excellent. Your word usage is absolutely sublime. This was truely beautiful.

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Daisuki
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Daisuki wrote a review · Wed Oct 26, 2011 6:42 pm

UWAH!! Your poems are awesome!
I love how you rhyme, but sometimes ya might want to be careful of the flow and the words you use to rhyme. But you do a great job with that. I love how this poem has a lot of weight, and I think you placed the exclamation marks well.

So take heed through the silence and its toll!
The winds of knowledge may steal your soul!
Not unless you find the true light.
Not the star, but Heaven, so bright.
Do not trust his silver tongue.
Soon to be here, the warning I’ve sung!


^ I liked this stanza a lot, but I think the second exclamation mark might be better with a period. Otherwise, your rhyming and rhythm is great, and the emotion is like FWAAA!!

~ Dai

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Seraph
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Stop sinning if you have a strong soul.
Continue committing fallacies for condemnation.

Wow, i really got to learn how not to be sooo speechless when I see a good work of literature. This was amazing and I seriously wish I could say more but it's just good. The only question I would ask is it to warn those who commit sin or does it push people to keep doing it? Please PM me the answer. Other than that, I really liked reading this poem. It was very well written. Keep writing.



Maybe what most people wanted wasn't immortality and fame, but the reassurance that their existence had meant something. No matter how long... or how brief. Maybe being eternal meant becoming a story worth telling.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality