Lunatic's Lament
A Mirror Never Lies:
I have always been amazed at the power the human mind possesses over what the eyes behold. Somewhere in the river of spawning possibilities, the brain often deciphers incorrectly what has happened with what the eyes are actually seeing.
I know for a fact that my Helen was murdered by me.
But I am also sure that she is not dead, because I swear she is telling me secrets in the faintest whisper.
They’ll be here soon.
I paced around the room, thinking about how incredible I was to make such a fine piece of art without even realizing it. I resolve into approaching the corpse once more, resisting the urge to kiss her bloodstained lips.
Helen was right. They will be here soon. I looked around the room, disgusted by how messy it was.
I took Helen’s body in my arms and dragged her to the bathroom. After filling the bathtub with warm water, I lay Helen inside, removing her internal organs and putting them in a black bag. I bathe her in our best soap, and then clothe her in her best gown. I sit her motionless body in front of the mirror and take her brush. Sniffing it in delight, I brush it through her blonde hair.
I dressed her face in her finest make up, painting her lips bright red and covering her hollow eye sockets with a black veil. She looked so beautiful that it took all my willpower to not carry her to the bed and love her once more.
“Let’s not let them come in,” I whisper in her ears. “Let’s have this night to ourselves, shall we?”
And so, taking an old wooden wheelchair I had found in our dingy basement when we moved in yesterday, and roughly wheel it down the hall to the kitchen area. I plant it at one end of the table and set an empty white plate in front of Helen.
“I will be with you soon, my love.” I said to her before walking back to the bedroom.
I wash my hands and change my clothes. Muffled screams echo down the hall, which is surly, my Helen, wanting me to come back to her.
I smile at my refection in the mirror.
“If you think this is fun, well just you wait till I’m done.”
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Yello, Jordin here with a review to write. I hope it helps.
I personally do not think this is a good piece of work I ma not trying to offend you this is infect very well written but it is just not the kind of thing that I would really like.
I would try to edit this to make it sound better you don't make any sense why would he kill "His love" I ma guessing it is a he.
And it is a little nasty the way you wrote it and who are these people and what do they want from you?
Anyway I would do a little work on the writing skills maybe and re write it so as to make more people want to read it.
Keep your writing going really you should just keep writing and you will get better and better like the old saying goes "Practice make perfect."
Well good bye.
~Jon~