Published July 10, 2011
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ok im still learning about this sight do i just post my next chapter(it will be loonger) here
SymphonyofSilence:yes i will im going to make it up as i go along so it should be interesting where it goes i would love suggestions
SubjectBlue:i have read that book loved it but it will have a small connections maby just a refrence
kr1117: this is prologue it will be longer
i might as well tell you whats this going to be about it is kinda like a X-men thing without the team where there are mutants but people are very preduace to them i kinda have a out line but i dont know where this will go
Hello! Here to review. There really isn't much to review, but oh well!(:
Well, I am very interested in this. I want to know why she thinks so. What's going to happen? You did a good job at grabbing someone's attention. The only thing that bothers me is that I wish it was longer. Is this the beginning of a chapter? Or prologue? I'm not sure.
Keep up the good writing! Write on!(:
-Katie.
Really awesome and all, only one tiny thing...
Kathy reminds by sound the name Carrie, Stephen King's first book, about an unpopular girl who eventually burns half the town to the ground, any relations?
Are you going to make this into some sort of Novel/short story? I hope you do. With that tiny paragraph you captured my attention. It sounds like something I would read. I can't decide if Kathy is supposed to be a good guy or a bad guy. Or maby girl...