Divine Intervention: Chapter Nine

by Sujana

Published February 27, 2017

18+ Language

In Divine Intervention

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language.

“Lieutenant.”

“Sir,” Ithuriel turned away from Elijah, staring directly into the Commanders’ eyes. Though he wasn’t exactly a ‘sir’ in a physical sense, Commander Camiel formerly of the Heavenly Armed Forces (who got to his ranks after defeating hoard after hoard of prisoners when the gates of hell were opened) was a man in every other aspect of his personality, starting from his attire to his training as an officer to his vocabulary, that could supposedly make a sailor blush when he was provoked. He had a flat chest, buzz cut blonde hair and bruises and burns spread randomly over his face and left eye, his eyes a startling blue despite his more feminine features.

“Word from the divine community has got out that the alleged ‘accident’ of the father of Nei Li was a murder in disguise,” He said, glaring the lieutenant in the eye. “Will you please explain to me how the Messengers obtained classified information about a current investigation without my permission?”

Elijah looked to Ithuriel, smirking. “Yes, Mr. They-Wouldn’t-Be-So-Dumb,” He started, wryly, “Tell us about the whole thing.”

“It was just about the subject and the father,” Ithuriel claimed, “What other information they have Zachary dug up, I swear.”

“The only swearing that will be done tonight will be done in a barrage of it while I hang your body on top of a pool full of acids that’ll make your eyes pop out of your head and your skin melt off your skull.” The Commander continued in a dead voice. “Fortunately for you, that won’t happen, as long as you prevent the news of the actual target of the crime. Brother Zachariah is still digging up the details to that case, so I implore you to go and convince him to write letters more benign to our case—along the lines of, ‘Mr. Nei Li certainly was the target of the attack and if you are the perpetrators you have no reason to go back and search for any actual, hidden target because there is none’.”

The two individuals in front of him drew back, unable to bounce back from the attack. Camiel turned to Elijah, trying on a smile. The fallen angel had seen more life on Pluto. “Mr. Woods, I admire your work the night before in talking Mrs. Downs away from Washington to a safer hiding spot away from the city. If you keep up this rate, you’ll earn your wings in the coming three years.”

“Thank you, Commander--”

“However,” He started, his voice high but firm. “Adriel and Pax are still out there, somewhere in the world and it appears to be open season on Mediators. I was wondering how your plan to cooperate with Earth law enforcement to capture the two is coming out.”

Elijah looked to Ithuriel, taking his turn to look overwhelmed. “I’ve released pictures of the two to police officers working on the Elizabeth West case, they’re looking into making it an international matter—but they still don’t understand the motivation for the attack.”

“They have their assumptions on what the two want?”

“They think the two are hunting down Christians. Some sort of terrorist plot, they say.” He shrugged. “That’s all fine and good, the majority of Mediators will be protected, but that leaves the other less open ones—vulnerable.”

Camiel nodded. “It’s progressing.” He turned to the two of them, straight back and upper lip. “You two can go to the Messengers branch and meet up with Zachariah and Gordon. I need both Zachary’s discretion and confirmation that Brother Gordon will be joining us in the Nei Li home to assist the boy morally. I want paperwork stating his supervisor, his purpose and his conditions, stating that he will not disrupt the investigation. Understood?”

“Yes, sir.” The two said, in unison.

“Good.” The Commander turned away, then, releasing his set of wings—a ruffled haze of brown and gold, shaped like an eagle. He flew away into the horizon, disappearing amongst the clouds.

“Ah, Camiel. Good to see you finally came.”

“Shut your talk hole, smart ass,” Camiel slid into the couch, rubbing his temples. “I only came here because the Court keeps sending me letters on how I haven’t been attending my ‘mandatory psychiatric evaluations’.”

The blonde man stared, concentrated green eyes piercing through the surface of his spectacles. He took off his brown coat, laying it over the couch opposite of the angel. “That temper of yours hasn’t cooled, I see.”

“No shit, Sherlock.”

“There’s no need to be so fiery, Commander.” The Counselor sat down, cross legged, elbows at the arms of his velvet recliner. He could be a furniture himself, Camiel argued; tacky green sweaters matching coinciding with the cream wallpaper and mahogany boarding, screaming ‘boring-suburban-Christmas’ along with the fire beside them. It was as if the psychiatrist had come in a package with the home. “I’ve been told by the Man Upstairs that you have attempted to hide your anger, in order to avoid seeing me. Is that so?”

Camiel sank deeper into the seat, scowling. “Honestly, with chairs like these I’d probably kill a man to avoid seeing you.”

“You’re evading, Commander.”

“Yes, Mr. Prophet-with-a-Degree-in-Psychology, that is so.” Camiel said, nearly yelling.

The psychiatrist tilted his head, observing. Taking in. “Has it worked?”

“Mostly,” The Commander claimed. He waited for a while. “Other than the fact that I’m tempted to behead my own team members and hunt down demons myself, I’m perfectly fine.”

“What sort of demons?”

“All of them. I’d cut off their testicles and feed them to goats myself, if I had to.” Camiel arched a brow. He leaned forward, elbows on the surface of his thighs, hands clasped in the space between his legs. “What would that matter to you?”

The Counselor grinned. His expressions gave no sense of security in his eyes. “The Father has told me about a certain…demon He believes you might have a grudge against. A fallen angel, and your partner during the eve of the war.”

Camiel pushed himself to the back of the chair, hands clenched at the arms of his chair, drawing a deep breath. “Don’t you dare.”

“A Brother Adriel, if I’m not mistaken. Quite the fellow, that one. A brute and a loyal soldier in the eyes of Hell, a traitor in the eyes of the Court, but a philosopher in his own right. Wouldn’t you agree, Commander?”

“Don’t you fucking dare--”

“Oh, but of course you agree. You were there when he was still an angel, listening to his conclusions of the state of the universe, his theory on how the Fathers’ kindness and love somehow fits into the whole picture—of course, that never set off, did it? No, no. It...transformed. Mutated. Do you blame yourself for that, Camiel? Do you lose sleep at night, knowing that you could’ve stopped your only true friend from falling into enemy hands? It was only just a thought, after all. You didn’t have to hit him or anything. You just needed to convince him the darkness was wrong. Was that so hard?” The man glanced down at the angels’ hands, now hot white with fury. “Well, was it?”

The angels’ response was immediate and predictable. The Counselor took his hands away from the arms of his recliner, allowing the angel to fall over him with burning eyes and a blood red expression. A hand slammed against the top of the chair, mimicking the sound of Camiels’ fist against the man’s jaw. He breathed. The Counselor grinned, sardonically. The bastard didn’t even blink through the episode.

“He wanted hell,” Camiel retorted, trying on a smile. “He got hell. He may have been poetic, but that didn’t mean he was smart.”

“How long did it take you to figure that out, Commander?”

“Oh, you’re just begging for someone to punch you in the face,” Camiel bounced off the recliner, cackling in mad rage. The Counselor glared at the angel, intently. Right. Evading. “Part of me knew from the very beginning.” He confessed, calmly. The glare continued. “The other part is—still processing it.”

The other man shrugged, reaching for the notepad on the table beside him. “I understand that you are handling a case involving this Adriel character.” He clicked on his pen, scribbling something on the open notepad. “I find that worrying, taking your past with him in consideration.”

“You talk as if he murdered my family.”

“Emotionally he was your only family, and the moment he left he took that part of you too.” The Counselor looked up briefly from his notes, one brow raised. “I fear you will not be able to control yourself if you find the character, and will be the cause of his death.”

“One less scumbag on Earth,” The angel replied. “I see nothing wrong with that.”

“You said it yourself, Commander—the more sensitive side of you is still processing the betrayal. Murdering the demon will make you more vulnerable to the dark, and we do not need another--” Camiel shot a glare at the man, scowling. Don’t you dare. “Renegade, among your kind. Therefore, I urge you to commit yourself to something that will allow you to express your anger in a less savage method.”

“And what is that?”

The Counselor picked up an extra pen and paper, shoving it in his hands. Camiel reads the top part, groaning before he could get to the end. “You have got to be kidding me.”

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Brigadier
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Brigadier wrote a review Review · May 10, 2017

And so you know how I always promise you reviews but then I never finish them and my reputation gets more and more tarnished. Well I'm here to settle all of my debts darling.

The cursing is fun. The creative cursing is really fun. The creative cursing combined with the creative torture and creative death methods, just really made my day. I was cursing a bit (still am) in reaction to whatever the hell it is that you have going on here. There's a lot of twists to it and some shockers that weren't horribly shocking but for the first second they were bad.
(and really? that character? what is wrong with you?)

There's not really that much to talk about since everybody else has picked through everything else and I'm left here talking about the psychiatrist. He was going to be the last point of business but because everything else is gone, we'll just skip to that. I currently love and hate the shrink because he's such an ass himself but Camiel is really just more of an ass. The descriptions of his attire were just another part i found the comedic value in, "‘boring-suburban-Christmas’ ". I lost it at this point and then I had to try and ground myself back in the seriousness of the fiction before me.
So Adriel is a fallen angel? Fun times there and times for more conflict and perhaps some times for Camiel to stab somebody. I'd quote more of the insults I like down here but I think we all know the ones I laughed at.

This chapter, though particularly darker than others, just really seemed to be light enough and humorous enough to balance out other thing. yes he is now dealing with these more depressing things but he also maintains so sarcastic and joking about it all, that readers just can't help laughing. Until they reach the last part and you should break down crying but as usual I didn't

I liked this one. Really didn't have that much to say but I wanted to give you this feedback and reactions to the chapter.
Good day.
~Lizzy
The Queen of the Book Clubs

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Lauren2010 wrote a review Review · Mar 12, 2017

Hi again!

YO okay so I am totally behind the angry angels. I really like that you're playing with the common idea of angels and angelic behavior (which is, actually, not that uncommon in pop culture now that I think of it). It's nice to see these angels as beings with a full range of emotions, yet even in anger they seek to do good. It makes them incredibly compelling characters. So good job!

My main question in this chapter has to do with this bit:

“They think the two are hunting down Christians. Some sort of terrorist plot, they say.” He shrugged. “That’s all fine and good, the majority of Mediators will be protected, but that leaves the other less open ones—vulnerable.”

Here we're running into (I think) the first mention of a vast array of other Mediators. I assumed that Nei Li wasn't the only Mediator, but this makes it sound like there are LOADS of them out there doing their work. Is this true? If so, what is their purpose?

I'm also confused by the bit "but that leaves the other less open ones--vulnerable". What do you mean by this? Are some Mediators known to God/angels but concealed from the rest of the world? Can angels be sent to act as protectors to these/all Mediators? Or are there too many Mediators to protect them all? In general, I think it would be helpful to have a bit of a longer explanation of Mediators in this chapter or an earlier one (or sprinkle in more information about them in appropriate chapters as you go). This keeps us from having to wade through a pile of plot revelations all at once and makes the information easier to digest.

Otherwise, another solid chapter! I'm thinking back on character introductions in this story so far, and how we don't always get ANY exposition re: characters when they're introduced. In this case, we heard Ithaniel's name in the previous chapter as an angel conversing with Gordon which helped ease me into these new characters. I think this would be a strong convention to use in earlier chapters, but even then I've felt myself needing just *slightly more* context in the beginnings of chapters where new characters/plotlines are revealed. Just something to keep in mind!

I know I'm slowly moving through this story, but I'm so glad to have it to read on my YWS reviewing days each week. Can't wait for more!

Keep writing!

--Lauren

Sujana replied · Mar 13, 2017

Are some Mediators known to God/angels but concealed from the rest of the world?


The Psychiatrist is talking about non-Christian mediators (of which he's included--before this whole Mediator business, he was an agnostic, and he hasn't gotten any more religious since). Though this would also more accurately encompass 'non-majority religion Mediators' as Adri and Pax aren't the only Mediator-killers out there--in China we have Shui (%u8C01, meaning Who?), whose a demon that erases the memories of Mediators, making their relatives ask Who? when people ask about their whereabouts. She hunts mostly Buddhist Mediators, but with the growing popularity of Christianity out there she's accustomed to more diversity than Adri and Pax. In India we have Raja, who hunts down various Hindu Mediators, but secretly leaves out the Muslim minority because he feels bad for the fellows. There are more still within the Middle East, Europe, South East Asia, Oceania, and even Russia.

Those are tangential worldbuilding details, but I'll definitely consider adding more info with this thing (along with advice from Blue).

You say you're slowly moving through it, but I'm really glad that anybody's reviewing it to be honest, never mind liking it. So yeah, all the thanks in the world regardless.

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BluesClues wrote a review Review · Mar 12, 2017

Question: did you name the one character Elijah Woods on purpose? I thought of Elijah Wood immediately, and I wasn't sure if you intended that or not.

I'm a bit bothered by the psychiatrist.

“Oh, but of course you agree. You were there when he was still an angel, listening to his conclusions of the state of the universe, his theory on how the Fathers’ kindness and love somehow fits into the whole picture—of course, that never set off, did it? No, no. It...transformed. Mutated. Do you blame yourself for that, Camiel? Do you lose sleep at night, knowing that you could’ve stopped your only true friend from falling into enemy hands? It was only just a thought, after all. You didn’t have to hit him or anything. You just needed to convince him the darkness was wrong. Was that so hard?” The man glanced down at the angels’ hands, now hot white with fury. “Well, was it?”


I mean, for being a psychiatrist - who is presumably supposed to help Camiel with his anger issues - he's awfully antagonistic. Does he have a purpose in goading Camiel that way? Does he think that'll somehow help? Or is he just terrible at his job?

Also, I think Camiel's description isn't nearly as good as Zachary's.

He had a flat chest, buzz cut blonde hair and bruises and burns spread randomly over his face and left eye, his eyes a startling blue despite his more feminine features.


For one thing, it's a list that describes Camiel's features in the most literal physical terms, rather than Zach's more interesting "toothpaste-shaped hair" and "licorice grin." For another, it's a little confusing. Mostly the "despite his more feminine features." A buzz cut and flat chest don't sound particularly feminine to me, whereas "startling blue eyes" don't seem at odds with feminine features. So while I can picture what he likely looks like, the description didn't captivate me as much as the descriptions of Zach in the last chapter. Plus, having a list of physical traits described here again sounds like something that should've happened earlier in the story, when Camiel was introduced, rather than all the way here in chapter nine.

I mean, assuming he was introduced earlier, which I do assume since I remember him being name-dropped in the previous chapter.

Although now that I'm looking over it again and see the "though he wasn't exactly a 'sir' in the physical sense"...is Camiel meant to be transgender? Or are angels naturally genderless? I'm not sure what you were trying to get across here, but the descriptions get me a bit confused.

Finally, I wanted to talk about this bit.

Brother Zachariah is still digging up the details to that case, so I implore you to go and convince him to write letters more benign to our case—along the lines of, ‘Mr. Nei Li certainly was the target of the attack and if you are the perpetrators you have no reason to go back and search for any actual, hidden target because there is none’.”


I think it's the "because there is none" more than anything, but if they want to send someone a letter that won't make people suspicious...this probably isn't it. "Don't look for suspicious circumstances surrounding this case, because there definitely aren't any" sounds super suspicious to me. Plus it's a little weird to say "and if you are the perpetrators you have no reason to search for a hidden target," because presumably the perpetrators of the crime, the people who committed it, would know that...because they were the ones who did it.

Overall, I found this chapter more confusing than the prior chapter, but since I haven't read the first seven chapters, I didn't want to go into more detail about that - I'm sure there are things I would understand better if I'd read this from the beginning! However, I'm interested in Camiel and his circumstances - maybe not as much as I am interested in Zach, but enough to read on.

So, you know, if I don't write a review for chapter 10 by tomorrow, give me a poke.

Blue

Sujana replied · Mar 13, 2017

I mean, for being a psychiatrist - who is presumably supposed to help Camiel with his anger issues - he's awfully antagonistic. Does he have a purpose in goading Camiel that way? Does he think that'll somehow help? Or is he just terrible at his job?


You're asking a spoiler question, so technically I'm not allowed to answer. However, would it help if I said Camiel, Adriel, and a ton of other characters in this series is in desperate need of a divine intervention?

Mostly the "despite his more feminine features." A buzz cut and flat chest don't sound particularly feminine to me, whereas "startling blue eyes" don't seem at odds with feminine features.


You make a good point with the description, I'm not sure why I sort of fell asleep at the wheel there. I make a point of the femininity of his features because the administration made a mistake and assigned Camiel the wrong body--he's not biologically male, and he's pre-testosterone. Most angels are okay with this usually, since a lot have no gender, but Camiel isn't like most angels. come to think of it a lot of the heads of the divisions aren't like most angels and it's very annoying

Overall, I found this chapter more confusing than the prior chapter, but since I haven't read the first seven chapters, I didn't want to go into more detail about that - I'm sure there are things I would understand better if I'd read this from the beginning!


I feel like this chapter would've been equally confusing eitherway, so I'm going to go ahead and go edit-mode on this sucker.

Ooh, that's really interesting about the angels and their gender or lack thereof. I like this particular imagining of that!



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