Published November 9, 2007
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Sorry, folks. This story is no longer canon, and has taken a twist for the better. Thanks for reading, and I hope you guys get to read the real thing!
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The scene with Ada was confusing. I didn't understand what was going on.
However, I did understand the beginning, and I think it's cool that he's black mailing the Commander.
"Don’t you dare finish that sentence.”
I loved this sentence!
“Will do, boss. Here’s your comp back. As for all of you, kiddies, keep all that in mind. One of you has to be a super, right?”
I don't really get this. If it's just a bunch of normal people that have never seen a super, how can any of them be a super? And how does this guy know that one of them is?
I didn't notice any mistakes when I read through it.