Hello, Rosendorn~
This is MergSword here with a review!
Grammar Issues and Other Errors
Let's see, I don't believe I found any visible grammar issues or major errors. I'm usually big on capitalization, even though it isn't important. And then I looked at the description of the poem, that non-capitalization was intentional, hahaha.
The Pros of this Poem
I love the way this poem captures emotion, and tells the reader how to accept the loss of a treasured loved one. It is very considerate to write a poem from the heart, meant for people going through hard times, especially as they struggle to accept that someone they truly loved is gone. As NeverNeverLandGirl said, I loved the way you closed the poem with a message of hope, that somewhat comforts the reader.
The Cons of this Poem
I couldn't find any cons of this poem. Although, poetry is usually meant to be like this, I did have trouble comprehending what you were trying to say in some parts. It's nothing to change, really, in fact, the words that you used were very creative, I guess it's my fault that I can't comprehend, in fact the words you used made the poem even better. (I'm asking myself why I put this in the con section of the review o-o)
My Overall Opinion
This poem was very beautiful, and I could tell you put much thought into it. The poem was an inspiring message to those who struggled to accept that someone passed away, but in the end, it was going to be alright. I will remember this poem.
~Keep on Writing!
Points: 240
Reviews: 73
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