Hello, this is Kman134, here to review your poem.
Now, i get what the message is; no one truly dies and that if you remember this person, then he will never be gone from your life. the similes and the symbolisms were well put together. the emotions, as well, were very strong.
"It’s just a word, anyway.
It’s what you’re meant to say,
It would just be pretending.
Maybe it would have been better, though
Than the universe of nothingness that wrapped around us
Seeping through every crack and winding infinitely tighter
As you slipped away."
Saying "Goodbye" may seem like a word, but it's a word that helps relieve the pain; some of this part seemed a bit nihilistic, calling it a "Universe of Nothingness". Some of this part was a little confusing, but still understandable. Also the metaphors were pretty good and deep, too.
Anyway, i loved this poem and wished to read another one like it.
Points: 60
Reviews: 200
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