Heya, RoseAndThorn! Casanova here with a review!
I put poets on the site in a hat and came out with you, so onward!
The first thing I have to say about this poem is just simply wow. This is really good, and I don't think I have much to critique at all! To the review!
You’re gone now, and I’ve moved on.
At least, I think I have.
Must one forget what is behind to look ahead?
For ever and always, I remain
Your Beloved.
This line here seems to be a bit of a contradiction. First you say you've moved on, then you state you're forever and always remaining their beloved. I could understand this if this was a state of confusion, but it seems like you go through the entire poem building it up to the little stanza I quoted. Then the shocker of stating,"Forever and always your beloved." Now, this could also be to enrage the person this was directed at, meaning it's a mockery,"Your beloved," but I got a serious note for this.
Overall this is a really good piece with strong images and a packed up version of emotion. What I mean by that is it looks and feels like emotion was put into this in great amounts, and I give props for that.
Anyway, that's all I have to say on this one and I hope it helped.
Keep on doing what you're doing and keep on keeping on.
Sincerely, Matthew Casanova Aaron
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