Ice Castle

by Roadnevertravelled
  • October 14, 2010
  • Poetry
  • Dramatic

Ice castle

I live here
In my castle of ice
frozen, sparkling,
ice.

I do not feel
the chill of ice
just the warmth
of being
somewhere I love.

The sun comes up.
Melting,
breaking,
losing all that's left.

I try to rebuild
my castle
of ice.

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Kwantack
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Kwantack commented · Fri Oct 15, 2010 9:44 pm

Dude, I loved this! And it sounds like everyone else does too! Maybe add a period at the end of your last sentence, and job well done!

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Wondergirl59
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Wondergirl59 commented · Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:15 am

Oh my God. I absolutely love it. It's kind of sad at the end where you say you have to rebuild your castle but thats why I love it so much. But it's not really that sad because you say you love it so it can't be that sad.

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Funkymomo
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Funkymomo commented · Fri Oct 15, 2010 12:07 am

OMG I love it! Great feeling to it also. try to use more big words!



Most people ignore most poetry because most poetry ignores most people.
— Adrian Mitchell