Hi! I tapped on this poem because it looked interesting, and I was not disappointed.
I love the detail, and the story doesn't seem like something that would be that interesting upon other circumstances, but you successfully achieved making it an interesting and captivating poem.
A few lines that I especially enjoyed were "coarse hands of the tea seller", "feeble old gray hands", and "bliss under her pillow".
It is very important to write something like this from the point of view of the protagonist, which in this case happens to be a coin. Being an inanimate object, a protagonist like this must have a specific point of view which you successfully described.
Only one flaw I saw in this poem was the end. The beginning seemed very well-detailed and ornate, while the one line seemed to be too much and not explained as well. This line was "until I was then taken into the bright sunshine, where cars honk and people chatter constantly."
You could've improved this, but other then that, I found this poem quirky and enjoyable, with great detail and imagery.
Good job!
-Space
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