Your Pretty Little Song

by RiverStar73519
  • October 3, 2011
  • Lyrics

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wonderland
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wonderland wrote a review · Tue Oct 04, 2011 12:15 am

Alright, so, I like this. It's a good start. My problem is that it's too repetitive, and I can't relate the these lyrics at all.
Go into more of a background, make it more of a story, just set to music. Make sure to put the emotion in there, so the listener and reader can relate.

If I’m a metal you’re my alloy


You used this. I found it didn't fit your lyrics, and was put it sort of randomly. Yes, you want to make similes and metaphors. but make sure they fit the lyrics you're writing. That's the hard part, trying to link metaphors to what you're writing.

Keep playing. That's the fun with song writing

~WickedWonder



It's kind of fun to do the impossible.
— Walt Disney